this yo 1st look at da nu money of chi-town


I got 4 toasters wit round scopes put ur life on a downward slope
you fall down da hill jill while i hustle ur water to a well like dope
niggas gonna snitch til my wanted poster makes me famous
yall battle kats is just hemroids, better known as anus
shit, my flamers torch yo ribs / call 'em a forman grill
if norman will, then nu is gonna get u like the psycho i am
pussy boy ran, pretendin to be bob marley screamin ''MY GUN JUST JAMMED''
I know yo type fan...I understand i'll have u damned as sadam
gotta chill 'cause i'll robb ya shield and ignite dis beef like smoked ham
u choked man, hopped on stage and fell like a drunk broadway actor
im higher class, flyin past and u aint in my circle like broken protractors
my flows da main factor but dis nine is another reason your leavin
an da punches leave kids gums hurtin like when they was ''teathin''
lookin like chrome spinnerz 'cause da steel stay close to da wheel
i'll peel ya melon now you tellin everybody not to bullshit on da real




teathin=when babies teeth are just startin 2 grow

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well............... flow iz........... okay and was actually pretty good, but would be better without the filler words (like in the last line when u said now twice).......... fix your structure and flow will follow........ not a bad piece though...... sorta reminds me of Havoc off of Mobb Deep.......... overall 7/10.......... step it up a little, and there may be a spot for u on TTI........ get 3 wins and tryout.........

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

my poetry:
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yo when r yall gonna ''critique'' my freestyle

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yo thanx chip i appreciate dat hommie

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It's On & Poppin, Baby

It was good, you put alot of words in your bars, though. I give it about a 7/10 too.

yo thanx dog where is yall rhymes at link me or somthin and i'll check it out

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Wackness. Leave the site.

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Dis nigga is actin like he actually wants a ass whoopin

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It's On & Poppin, Baby

Flow Was Straight... Lyrics Good For A Keystyle... I Would Like To See You Write Someshit And Take Some Time On It I Think It Would Be Real Good... Anyways Good Drop Man Keepin Uppin Ya Skills

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Yo Thanx Devin I Juz Noticed U Have A Freestyle I'll Check Dat Now Dog!!!

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It's On & Poppin, Baby