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09-18-05, 10:11 AM | #1 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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Locked Mouth
IP: A9BD 1141
Born with a corrupted mind. Having difficulties picturing in my head Like One time I thought Lead was a woman tits..I found out ...............................It wasn't when the poisonous in my mouth it spread born with a sight that sees very different. I’m not normal like the others Like the time I thought A knife was a woman body figure .................................................. .That caused me an eternity of slumber we've been friends for a very long time, sharing everything together both like suns in any havoc weather. how about we spice the amber 5 years I’ve been looking at that smile but never gotten so close to it Tried so hard to acquit. Just listening to your voice makes me a spirit 5 years we've been friends. Tired of walking side by side. I want you When I'm around your presence i feel so hot like I’m having the flu I don't have to go to Hawaii or Jamaica for the perfect view there's you Losing control of myself and your the only one who can...Like voodoo Let's be me and you like the full-moon, there’s no half. Let’s be one Let's share our lust cold as Antarctica but with fire like a inferno dragon When you look at me what do you see a reflection of perfection? When there's a rose in a woman, there's a snake-inside being hidden On my face attach a mask, you fool. Couldn't even see the real me without saying open-sesame my kiss open the gates of your heart easily my tongue so sneaky, ejected poison inside you, without you looking Destroying everything in you as it lurks. slowly your life is disappearing You hear the soft moans from my mouth, but the lust is soo fake Foolish human do you not see the life I'm bound to take. Now you lay My smile is sharp and my beauty is do divine. Yes but I'm not human You've been cursed by me and taking your life using me was .................................................. ...........................................Not a good decision I don't have a mouth, it's sealed by the metal sharpness of my beauty sharpness cutting you in half...foolish mortal. Now your life is so puny The slashes creates my moan and you scream but I don't.......I love it Cums is not the color of white. But my favorite is red. Your life .................................................. ..........................................now has been ended I post this on RB and they didn't get the concept..so let me break it down like I did to them Mostly it's about a retarded person who see things differently...Now the whole concept of the verse is that He see's a knife differently..A knife is a woman to him...Get it? Some of ya'll might say "O your not following on the Topic" The Topic is Locked mouth...A knife doesn't has a mouth. Okdokey?
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09-18-05, 10:18 AM | #2 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: A9BD 1141
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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09-18-05, 01:24 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: E881 4964
Well.This was good.Flow was good for the most part due to the nicely placed internals at points.But regardless,there were a few lines that were stretched out.Maybe some line compression could help you out in the future.Cause i don't see anyone,not even twista or bizzy bone,gettin that many sllyables over a beat.As for the topic,I was lost,just like RB.I thought the metaphor concept may have been too complex and may go above the head of some people.(like me).Cause complexity is a good thing,but not when you over do it.
Overall-7.0 Remember...this is just my opinion.Don't come hating at me please. Last edited by Districk : 09-18-05 at 01:32 PM. Reason: put RV instead of RB |
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09-18-05, 01:53 PM | #4 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: A9BD 1141
Cool...Uppin......
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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09-18-05, 07:22 PM | #5 | ||||
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Drop 1 more link my puertorican mami
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