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01-06-05, 12:11 PM
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yo my first written on the site
IP: 1B3B C284
FIRST WRITTEN ON HERE I'LL HAVE THE AUDIO FOR IT SOONTIMES...Hate it or Like it i don't care your not gassin noone or hurtin noone...loves much appreciated haters get a life it aint worth talkin shyt over the computer come see me when you have time...1
Young girl lost, when is you gonna learn to love yourself Okies To trust him mean that you can't even trust yourself He was a dog when you met him now you mad as shit You can't change that man what you see is what you get And just because he throw you out don't let him walk over you Have some pride you're a woman make him respect you Brought bitches for him Took a couple stitches for him He at his baby mom house while you wash his dishes for him How you gon' play Believe anything he say Choose him over your family on any given day I could tell you not happy crying yourself to sleep Gotta hit out on his ass you still pushing his jeep Your career ain't pursuing it When miserable what's love got to do with it? Makes no sense What us ladies gotta put up with The backbone of ya niggaz that we put up with Everything we hold y'all down when times is bad Fuck a sista for two years now denyin he the dad Tryna escape responsibilities be a man And you won't even take a blood test nigga you ain't a man Lie after lie said you'd always be there That's fucked up cause the baby ain't asked to be here Man she gotta struggle Shakin her ass in a thong Tryna make ends meet, stressed out all alone Scraping up pamper money tryna keep her head focused Hard to stay strong when better days seem hopeless Everything happens for a reason it was written Tried to make her stumble in this game but she didn't Got turned out now you went and got loose at the panties Went from weed to pills to coppin nose candies Ain't had a siege yet but you headed for the grave Screwin everybody don't give a shit about AIDS Lettin niggaz run through you and use you up You don't know that shit could mentally abuse you up A free suck in a big truck Neighborhood niggaz callin you a free fuck Your homegirls havin thoughts of gettin rid of you Stay smokin & whorin that's pitiful All kinds of thoughts is goin through your head make a change Ain't used it in a long time but you got a brain Get yourself together girl you better straighten up It's hard as shit on your own plus you growin up Go to school get a job make your own cash Screw what them niggaz gon' say when you walk past  Leave A Comment...
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01-06-05, 12:18 PM
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IP: 1B3B C284
Post feedback...i'll return the favor, promise...
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01-06-05, 12:24 PM
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a.k.a prozak
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IP: 9A80 AF2E
pretty good i'd probably give it a 6.5/10 maybe a little more but keep it up and you'll start to even get better
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01-06-05, 12:25 PM
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IP: 1B3B C284
iight thankz for the comment...
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01-06-05, 12:27 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
aight,
I like the topic,seemed accurate since you was form BK, but you should change your structure..just center it and take out the //'s then it'll be aight..just include some multis in it.. like instead of rhying like dictionary and tree..rhyme like dictionary and temporary? understand if you got aim get @ me @indeph11 so i can hlp you a lil bit see I was honest despite u bein so fine
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01-06-05, 12:31 PM
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www.militantmusic.com
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IP: 6804 D41F
its preety good i like the opening aight vocab and wordplay structre was good 6/10
return the favor plz.........
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01-06-05, 12:32 PM
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Obscure Intelligence
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IP: 4BD0 87AE
ya man that was id say addiquite wasnt the best but every one has a bad first time
naw just joking man it was good i liked it had good word play word usage and it was tight man really tight i mean the word play was good the metttas were goodand it was overall a good start for your first for the site man it was really off the hook good job i say 7.5/10
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01-06-05, 12:36 PM
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IP: 7B14 7A00
indeph was true yeah mami i like it its pretty good but he was right take away the // cause it gets you off flow and some of the lines we're to short gotta make them a little bigger but it was allright 5.5/10 good Stuff keep it up
i got 1 in my sig people look at it u people sleepin on it lol
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