oi make sure you return the favor man with an honest vote..with the link above............................................. ...thx...................pz

i can't vote but my advise wont hurt.

both verses were mad played..nothing was really new between the both of u
the killing people lines are just weak..and both verses need some creativity and clever fabrications of punches, wordplay, and definatly an increase in vocab..elevate both

Malice came way iller though..better flow, better like 2 punches, and flow


vote on this battle, needs 1 vote to end..thx
knowledge -vs- dizzy hommel

peace

Here's how I saw it.

Flow=Malice, he had a strong structure and it was easy to read to a beat and sounded good in my head. J, you need to work on your structure a bit and your rhymes seemed a little forced.

Punches=Malice, his punches just hit harder. J, most of your punches were just like Mom shit which is played out, work on your punches and it will help out.

Personals=Malice again, he just had more personals as well, it didn't really seem like J had any personals. J, work on your personals, a few good personals are good things to have in your arsonal, or the abitlity to come up with a few good personals rather.

Vocab=J, he had a bit more vocab than Malice. Malice I think this is an area you could work on, good vocab opens up all kinds of options for your verse.

Over all=Malice, you had good punches, good personals, and a good flow to it, if you work on that vocab I think you have some good potential here. Just keep working and elevating.
J, you need some work on developing your punches, personals, flow, and a little on your vocab, you have some potential, you just need to work at it, keep posting and elevating.

Vote=Malice, he took this with an over all stronger verse than J.

Shit I forgot to ask for votes on my battle. Here it is. Thanks.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108625

Yo i cant up anymore J.. so u mite want to if u wanna get this battle ended

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yo j u wanna up dis battle to get it over wit or what?

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Ayo... J obviously dont give a shit bout dis battle so i guess close it if u can since nobody's votin an fuck the win or the lose

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aiight my vote goes to Malice his flow was better and smooth and also his punches were hitting hard..he had a good opener and closer aswell.!
j...your verse was ok but your flow was patchy and had no structure,your punches were missing the target however a couple landed.your opener was weak and your closer was not that much better....

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