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[[Chorus 1]]
[[Issues..Overpowerin' circumstances to the point of deadly incidences become life's 'Driving..Force']]
[[Mentals 'Piss-On..You're..Every..Hour..Spent' thriving for more then just drugs, crime,death and 'Piling..Remorse']]

[[Verse 1]]
[['Overabundance..Smothers' with withering misery upon 'Covers..Of..Clamped..Lovers']]
[['Another..Moment..Shelters' unwillingly identities of a fellow
'Brothers..Slug..Sampled-By..Another']]
[['Unbareable..Consequenses' still filling me with doubt about my
'Numerical..Glock-Insedenses']]
[[Sergical..Plot..Insistions' perfecting killings instilling
'Undismisable..Shot..Persisions']]
[['Mentalities..Abrubted' by fatalities unjusted often violated by
'Authourities..Kurupted']]
[['No-More-Of-These..Combustions' I cant handle these samples of dwindling
'Pholosophies..Destructing']]
[['Abortion..Aposed-To..Supporting' no more faces of joy just uprooting emotional
'Touture..Aposed-To..Good-Forchunes']]
[['Distorting..Exposed-Views..Compotion' no thought safe from social erosion or
'Uncordinating..Rowed-Truths..Organisations']]

[[Chorus 1]]
[[Issues..Overpowerin' circumstances to the point of deadly incidences become life's 'Driving..Force']]
[[Mentals 'Piss-On..You're..Every..Hour..Spent' thriving for more then just drugs, crime,death and 'Piling..Remorse']]
THIS SO CALLED DRIVING FORCE SHELTERS NO MORE THEN MENTAL RECOURSE,AND ALONG THE COURSE ALL I SEE IS BROKEN SUPPORTS! for...........

[[Verse 2]]
[['Infactuated..Youth' who just infatuated with crews, doing any thing to be
'Cordnated..With..You']]
[['Surated..Blumes' later crawl to they rooms..swep like brooms, eyes forever in
'Dialated..Views']]
Now,
[['Obituaries..Pleased' to see its inventory receiving another member to its army of
'Anarchies..Underbread']]
[['Semetaries..Dreaming' of the days a willingly body lays motionlessly in the dirt
'24-Feet..Asleep']]
[['Bullet-Proof..Men' suddenly find they not equipped wit bulletproof heads as they lay wita
'Skull-Filt-With-Two..Leads']]
[[Still-It-Confusez..Tens' of millions of peoples thinking others unequal until a round
'Spills-Shit-Loose,..You-All..Dead']]
[['Puberty..Pushed' by youth looking to grow up in groups of men taking on glocks leaving
'Communities..Crushed']]
[[Insanities..Touched' by the youths that rushed growing up, n' now they just
'Instatutionaly..Clutched']]

[[Chorus 2]]
[[I 'Communicate..The..Worlds..Muse' for all you to see were i come and
'What..I've..Been..Threw']]
[['Fasilitate..These..Words..Tunes' upon my lips crude and abrupt platforms for
'Unsaught..Lives..To..Speak..Threw']]

[[Verse 3]]
[['Surereal..Satements' shape this page of the words placement as showing the worlds
'Obscure..Nations']]
[['Real..Patience' is of the essence to be able to with hold and
'Conseal..These-Pages']]
of
[[Ignored..Faces' now shown to all places threw my secretion of the mouth like
'Obscure..Tastes-n']]
[['Unexplord..Cases' now blown into securities faces leaving no choice but to
'Fallow..The..Traces']]
[['Imaginations..Reality', mental pictures no longer fictional thought processies but acted upon with
'Irratications..An..Self-Indulgensy']]
[['Expectations..Of..Indentity' are no longer of ammenedies serenity gone and
'Inflictions..Thriving..Steadily']]
[['Readily..Complacations' wait eager and anxious to act upon man's weak
'Immunity..Tward..Temptations']]
[['Steadily..Antisipating' is deaths hand threw man forever participating in the act of
'Internaly..Damaging']]

[[Chorus 2]]
[[I 'Communicate..The..Worlds..Muse' for all you to see were I come from and
'What..I've..Been..Threw']]
[['Fasilitate..These..Words..Tunes' upon my lips crude and abrupt platforms for
'Unsaught..Lives..To..Speak..Threw']]
[[Now I've shown you just how the earth revolves no matter what news..
Weather you liked it or not I spoke all I 'Had..To']]

Dam...
yawl say u want longer.....
i give u longer.....
u give me nuffin but the sweep..
Dam...

that was pretty ill drop i enjoyed readin it and the flow was good the vocab was pretty good just keep postin and elevatin and u'll do well just keep droppin

Yeah i agree...this was a pretty good piece...it flowed pretty well through out the piece, didnt really get off track...your vocab was pretty good...your content was good too...chorus flowed pretty well i thought...overall it was a good drop...keep at it...and keep dropping.

and if you could return some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84642

thanx fo the upps peoples.....
lol not to bad fo a 13 year old white cat... huh?