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Old 02-22-03, 04:54 AM   #1
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Endovidual Mind - You cant catch us (Feat. Concise and Lucid)

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Artist: Endovidual Feat. Concise & Lucid
Song: You can't catch us
Order: Concise, Lucid, Endovidual
Concise&Endo on the hook.

Lol @ this track. You might not think its much, but
we are lovin it. We had a ball making this shit yo.
And the outro is fucking dope! Kind of an inside
thing, but we were extremely lifted. Lol Anyways,
the three of us have studio time on sunday at 2:30,
I am mad excited, we just gon fuck around on one
of my beats. Uhhhh, ya... pz

http://concise.dmusic.com/music/stream/lofi/46908
http://concise.dmusic.com/music/stream/hifi/46908
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Feel free to download, or leave comments.

Cise
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Old 02-22-03, 05:09 AM   #2
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and by the way, this is my second audio ever!!




enjoy...


DEAMN!!!!
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Old 02-22-03, 05:26 AM   #3
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concise already knows what I think.

Lucid- Your mic presence needs work because your levels were everywhere and at times it was hard to hear what you were saying. Another thing work on is a more consistent flow, because your flow was uneven at spots(To many syllable/missing syllable).

Endovidual- Use a better rhyme scheme, that rhyme scheme you used for this beat was not all that great. Internal rhyming wouldn't hurt ether a long with some multi-syllable rhyming. Mic presence could use work as well as the delivery.

this track was alright I would think up a new hook and polish up a few spots



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Old 02-22-03, 05:33 AM   #4
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thanx yo, word i just got into audio, still converting my writing style into an audio structure,shit is hard yo...lol
and this was my second audio ever!

uppin^^
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Old 02-22-03, 02:58 PM   #5
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converting? it shoulda been based ona audio format...what, u never recited your rhymes outloud before??

strange...
oNE...
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Old 02-22-03, 03:05 PM   #6
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Do you remember converting from text to audio?
Its a completly different structrue of verse. If you
spit a text verse its gonna sound wack on a beat
and not juts because it wasnt written to the beat.
Audio lyricism is in a lot more simple format. But
it takes more talent to get it all to work. Your
drunk if you dont understand that.

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Old 02-22-03, 04:13 PM   #7
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NICE. You guys pumped that one out hella quick, thats ill.
Cise, you came raw to this beat
indo, nice lyrics, outro wit you & cise is dope.
lucid... Im impresed with your skills, who would have known?
Cise, hit me up, ive been doin some audio at my house... Give me a beat to rap to, or we should colab.
either way, hit me up asap
peace
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Old 02-22-03, 04:18 PM   #8
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Why the fuck dont you just get on msn you fucking panzy?!
lol, Im texting you.

Cise

PS.. Lucid is actualy usualy doper...
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Old 02-22-03, 08:51 PM   #9
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Concise - Dope Flow , Lyrics Pretty Nice , Voice Fits Well , Quality Is Nice . . . Overall Nice Verse.

Lucid - You Rushed Flow A Couple Times .. Lyrics Were Pretty Nice .. Other then Flow You Had A Pretty Solid Verse.

Pretty Nice Peice All Of You..

Keep ' Droppin.
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Old 02-22-03, 09:02 PM   #10
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ayo i was on this track to..lol

my shit wasnt worth a comment or what?
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^My Fault Man, I Read The Title And Seen Only "Concise And Lucid" And Stopped After Lucid.


Endo: Pretty Nice , Flow Is A Little On And Off, Work On Following The Snare Snaps .. Lyrics Were Pretty Nice, Overall Pretty Nice Verse.
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Old 02-22-03, 11:54 PM   #12
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lol....thanx man, and just as a reminder this is my second audio ever recorded so yea ill be sure to take all the crit. into action on my next...should be done tomarrow....studio time, DEAMN!!!
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