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06-24-04, 11:12 PM
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-MetaSkriptz..vs..C.M.F.S-
IP: 7BE2 A0A1
::::..Rules..:::: 20 Lines Minimum 30 Lines Maximum Check In By 6-26-04 Spits Due By 6-28-04 Votes End 6-30-04 3-0 is a K.O Topic: Robbing A House Good Luck To you! 'MetaSkriptz'
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 DOPER THEN DOPE Last edited by MetaSkriptz : 06-27-04 at 04:43 AM. |
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06-25-04, 12:26 AM
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IP: 4779 5259
Checkin in
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06-26-04, 12:56 AM
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MetaSkriptz..vs..C.M.F.S-
IP: A229 F2CC
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checkin in
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C.M.F.S vs QBsmasher C.M.F.S vs Flagrant Foul C.M.F.S vs -NERVES- ILLunitic vs C.M.F.S C.M.F.S vs VALOR ________________________ [IMG]  [/IMG]C.M.F.S music |
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06-26-04, 01:51 AM
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IP: 4779 5259
My Friends and My people Noticed one Rich Crib Asked him if he was down but my Nigga Fibbed Soul inscripted my mind was sick Only Rich was there Greedy heart of mine was full of greed of every single hair Layers Scratching as my heart was felt like it was bitened Got my Friends together planned it out but my soul was frightened 2 Weeks layer bonaculars setting on the bottom of my eye sockets We scoped out his crip as set as pockets, Set his cash in Safe Lockets Durations keeping me down we set back and waited for the time Friends was like dime, and they was like devils turning my heart on a grim FInal Day 12:00 O' Clock we took the Ford Van and parked is safley Everyone was sleep in the neighborhood as I was grafly We Slashed the Glass with only one peep of noise decended My friends went around the other way left me by myself offended Snuck in the house while the Rich white Man was sleep everyone got in safly and it was 4 people deep Checked every picture behind the wall to try to find the safe to Crack Finally relized it was a cheap safe so we cracked it with one wack :WISPERING:Put the money in the bag to me:WISPERING: It was so dark there was nothing barley to see We got the Cash ran out the Delicated Door Lights Turned on and We Herd POLICEMEN say 'Get Down on the Floor' Friend try to Run got Shot terribly and he was so Grenchured Next thing We know we was in the Police Station with our heart trenchured We waited for several hours and they took the hand cuffs off our hands In a racial Fact they said was it was them 4 kids who had black gloves on there hands 3 detectives walked in and stared for a quick minute in Graduate Desination They sat down in the chairs looked at us calmy as soft came heistation They Brung in my friend and he was bleeding right out his thigh thre him beside us we looked at them and they said "WHY"
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DOPER THEN DOPE Last edited by MetaSkriptz : 06-26-04 at 02:00 AM. |
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06-26-04, 05:16 AM
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MetaSkriptz..vs..C.M.F.S-
IP: A88B F94E
ROBBING A HOUSE ( intro ) homie G's times three aprochin houses behind trees doin roll overs like AL-kapone makin sure no-one's home enterin through windows left open by dumb fucks is how they get in so you guess they got some luck just providin thereselves takin everything they can dividin the wealth there makin a third to each man it's not a crime these people have more than enough look at me i'm poor as fuck without a single bit of stuff ( the conversation ) "we only do this shit because no-one believes in us" "dressin in black like this so no-one can see us" "i can tell you right now this is the last house i'm doin" "if i'm home late again my moms gonna be spewin" "lets just grab some shit... we need to get the fuck out" "got so much stuff already you better call a truck out" "mutha fuckers stop with the chatter start fillin ya pockets" "before these guys arive and take our heads off with rockets" "yeah like right now i just heard a car pull in" "OH SHIT!... lets go... grab what your takin" ( outro ) so you know it's not a crime it's just a living and a lifestyle rob from the rich give to the poor is the only way to survival i've done the shit before a hundred times or maybe more grab as much as you can and run straight out the back door
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C.M.F.S vs QBsmasher C.M.F.S vs Flagrant Foul C.M.F.S vs -NERVES- ILLunitic vs C.M.F.S C.M.F.S vs VALOR ________________________ [IMG] [/IMG]C.M.F.S music |
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06-26-04, 12:45 PM
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IP: DF7B C8F7
First off props to both for ur verses and dropping as early as you. Meta that text font and colour u write in makes it diffucult to read by the way i got a freakin headache.
I think MEta got this because he had better rhyme scheme, great imagery and his lines were pretty descriptive and altho the story did not go so where amazing, it was very well described, i was expecting a twist of some sort like one of the friends grassed them up. But good verse Meta. As for CMFS, nice try but I really didnt think you put much effort into this, maybe you werent feeling the topic but ur vocab was very simple and it wasnt really a great take on the topic. Nice try but Unfortunately for you, Meta took this quite well. Vote Meta. o and LMAO at this.. Quote:
used the same words and same layout in a rhyme scheme im writing for my topic, better change it before peeps think im biting. |
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06-27-04, 04:39 AM
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IP: 3240 794D
lol aight uppin
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06-30-04, 08:15 PM
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RV SPOTLIGHT, GET AT ME!
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IP: 80EF 45DD
Metaskripts had nice imagery in his story, but your story kind of finised with no real ending. Or maybe I was just expecting a better ending because the buildup was nice, but you kind of left us hanging. Still a soldi drop on a difficult topic.
CMFS- I like how you layed out the topic into intro, conversation and outro. I like the format, I just think you could have done better with your vocab and imagery. kind of a basic drop, not much too it. Next time just get a little deeper with your storyline and use that format to your advantage. v-metaskripts
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  I had to get a new couch, but as you can see the fun continues! A.I.
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07-05-04, 07:00 PM
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IP: 0542 1084
A'ight...this was an okay topical battle...Meta...your imagery was nice fo sho dawg...it seemed so real an shit...nice werk there...structure was off in places but ya verse still flowed nicely...vocab was tite...CMFS...you came a'ight...vocab was not the greatest...structure was pretty good...flow was good...but ya imagery wasn' there...
Vote- Meta. No hate, hit up my topical. Thanks. |
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07-06-04, 02:02 AM
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IP: 3240 794D
Close For automatic K.O.
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