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Check.. Topic = Second Coming

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

That's fine with me

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Second Coming

Regular – First Coming
Italics – Second Coming


Regular – Jesus
Italics – Hitler

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

Reign of hell fires ignite as Angels and Demons alike recite
Hymns unspoken smoking words provoking verbs apocalyptic
Return prolific, pestilence, wrath, famine, and death to be specific
Four horsemen personified, one for each limb, extremities
Striking down all enemies, without a thought, farm’s bought
It’s been taught, this transition would be quick and violent
Leaving the entire solar system silent, rivers run with blood
Crimson victims fumes fill rooms and soon envelope tombs
As tectonic plates shift, causing a rift in mantle, just a sample
Real power, God like entities shocked by the hour, cower
Knowing their time is here, I smell the neglectfull’s fear
Pear deep into the hearts of those unworthy, pass judgment
My sentence, no penance too late fate’s slate is written in stone
Shatter their bones; scatter their moans across hell’s landscape
Let those led a stray taste damnation’s sensation for man’s sake
Now listen, this mission is to free the faithful from evil’s grasp
Separate the good from the bad, to eradicate Lucifer’s last laughs
End it all in blood baths, the bubonic plague couldn’t match
If my children thought the great flood was harsh, witness my wrath

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Can we please get some votes?

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Wow, a great battle, bothe of ya'll did execellent.... Unreal; I like how u put Jesus and Gods life in a parallel perspective, It made the reader think and it had a good flow to it..... H.D; real good, the flow was there, the vision was there. I reallie felt it. This was a hard one to judge. Bothe contestants gave a lot fo the reader to indulge... but I'mma have to go wit H.D. for this one... it was a lil more deeper. Unreal kinda fell off at the end... this is wat I call a battle

Winner: H.D.

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Lyrical Rapsody

Thanks for the vote. Nobody understood my verse ahaha... It's about Jesus getting betrayed by the Jews, so he comes back as Hitler to avenge himself by murdering millions of Jews.. Catch my drift?

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

I Am Unreal- Alright, this very much a good verse. You had a decent complexity in your verse. The vocabulary was good, but sometimes it ain't about vocab, the imaginary in your verse had me displaying pictures. Sense of emotion was there, not that much, but you've descriptive enough so I feel the character feelings. The grammar was decent, your concept was sub-par, very good. Conclusion, this was a nice verse, keep writing.

H.D.-This has already been done, I mean the concept, which I started to not liking about your verse. Ok you got vocab, using too much vocab if you ask me, but uh, nice descriptive imaginary words. Uh your emotion is there, not that much. I can't really say much cause it was overall played out. No hate here. I was feeling it, but its all about how you approach the topic and you came 'ok' but the creativity doesn't support it.

V/I am Unreal, and not just because he in my crew, because he came dope with his creativity and more interesting

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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*

Hd Had mad word play.. bounce 2 his writen.. stayed on topic (so did IAU) but i felt his more.. cause i would of never guessed it was bout Jesus... sorry.. IAU .. but ur scheme was a beauty

v/ HD