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Old 05-17-05, 12:27 AM   #1
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Topic: Killing Your Father

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Old 05-17-05, 12:36 AM   #2
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Old 05-18-05, 02:54 PM   #3
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Old 05-20-05, 07:32 AM   #4
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Old 05-21-05, 12:23 AM   #5
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I didnt really follow the "Killing your father" topic through the whole verse i just did it on some Fathers in general for most of it

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A fatherless society is common in this day and age
2 parents are rare<<<its sad but this saying i cant rephrase
when a dad is born, surplus thoughts of him are staged
given the title "worthless heathen"...its drilled and engraved
some true, some false, other opinions you must exclude
until you go through first hand...you know no hunch what fathers do
when it boils to me...see the dead beat one has come and gone
folded green...could not make me breathe his air or keep me calm
imagine a father who bribed, stole, and lied to cheat in life
not only to childs and wives but satan and god alike...
he wasnt presented with insight, a drunk with no might
instead infected with night crime, devlis fury were his type

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At a young age i knew i wasnt blessed with a father
but adressed with a cursed mother and living life non-proper
at school i was never teased or called an orphan by gang leaders
cuz in my area 95% of those kids never had no fathers neither
i knew how they all felt...sometimes the rage inside were bombings
exploding...but we were all one...same emotions in seperate bodies
fights represented excessive anger...also hate at the teachers
for teaching us bullshit like how to act like rich leaders
but we all ignored the rest...never went to what the teachers showed me
these are my peoples...the best, these are my homies

Him...Personal
I remember the days when birthdays and christmas passed
no cards, presents or wishes...during holidays i felt gassed
like maybe i would meet my dad...or talk to him on the phone
but the wish never grasped...so on those days i felt alone
felt a rage unexplainable, if i saw him i would strike nine times
and bend his fuckin neck backwards disassembling his spine
how could a man abandon his seed...a part of his creation
a chance to evolve a human breed...forming life was his sanction
but he gave it up...for what? a 6 pack of coronas and cigarrettes?
a shitty apartment, in a building where rapist's times were spent?
fuck it, one day him and me will clash...i will kill what tried to kill me
nevermind...he had a heart attack...God did it for me...
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Old 05-21-05, 12:44 AM   #6
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Topic: "Killing Your Father"

I aint trynna play..
.......I called my bitch on the phone today..
Apparently her father doesnt like me..
Shit, well thats ok..
What else did he say?
"He said hes gonna bash you.."
.....Thats like my last girls dad..
(heh) & Guess what happened to that dude..
"I dont wanna know"
.........I nailed his face to his testicals..
Bashed his head till he regressed, having to drink from his wife breast-milk..
"Yo leave my dad alone!"
Hell to the fucking no....
I'll shove an AK barrel half way into his ass hole..
Then play russian rullette with a fully loaded clip
............& blast off.. Cause talking shit is a major disastor..
But killing your bitches dad? Is artistic,
Using hydrocloric acid making his face blistered..
Bitch I'm never fakeing this shit, you can catch me with match sticks..
Pouring peterol over his back then setting fire, its that quick..
Then after the aftermath, his charred corpse smells like bacon n rat shit..
I advise side of the highway wrapped in plastic for maggots..
To decompose this stagnent fagget of a dad bitch..
"Omg your grose!"
Yeah?, well fuck you too..
...Tomorrow a song about killing girlfriends is on the scedual..
You wont ever catch me stressing dude..
I killed my girls father--
......what makes you think that I wont kill you?
What extra terrestrial godly un-human loophole were you guessin
Was gonna have any effect against my lyrical weapon..
I'm more explosive than, september 11..
"Why you gotta you kill him?"
Shut the fuck up slut..
No more questions..
*HANGUP+DIALTONE*


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Old 05-21-05, 03:59 AM   #7
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Interesting topic.

Final- Decent piece overall. Some of the lines seemed forced, but overall everything went well. Not a big twist. Vocab was fine and same with everything else. Nothing that great or anything that stood out.

Nos- You are one sick individual, lol. Overall I felt your creativity was a lot better and overall you followed the topic better. Nothing that special again, but a little better then final's.

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Old 05-22-05, 11:26 PM   #9
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yo i gotto give it to compose he had alot emotion..
a vivid VIVID picture every man that grew up in a single home has felt those words ..
this is a beutiful piece nos ya shit was tight but i felt your vocab came up short compared to compose but every thing else was down the line a tight battle but compose got it for me! vote compose
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Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


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Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
 
Old 05-23-05, 04:46 AM   #10
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^Its cool man, keep ya style firmly 2004..

Vocab only wins in newb battles fool..
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Old 05-23-05, 09:56 PM   #11
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We need one more vote in this battle...
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Old 05-25-05, 01:58 AM   #12
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ok compose good drop here but your flow was way off and imagery was ok but emotion lacked a little i think you couldve upped them both here 5/10
nos good imagery and emotion nice flow but what got you this was how creative you were on this topic here nice nice drop 7/10
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Nos wins by one vote..............
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