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10-18-05, 07:41 PM
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The Worst Feeling ...Ft Mr Multies..Untraceable
IP: 31C2 62EB
Malicious. Growing up in my hood, I thought it felt so good.. To have someone that understood,someone who could. Stop you from doing wrong, and chill with all day long. Someone who sung that beutiful song.. .............................And made you feel like you belong It felt so right, The way i had you moaning that night. Was I wronge?Is there somethin i cant see beyond sight? Is this really the women, i wanted to be with the rest of my life The one to propose to ....And make my wife..? It all seemed so real..and the best thing that could happen to me. You would say you'd love me forever..thats what you would gaurentee.. Till that dreadful day..I got a phone call from my boi Saying he saw you. Cheatin on me!... .........I confronted you and asked is this TRUE!You just cried and know. You had made a mistake..you said baby please..i dont wanna be just a friend And all i replied was the best feeling i ever had ... had come to a crashing end Chorus My feelings are at there worst because my heart has burst And now the tears emerse, im broken and this isnt the first Another hurts done.......from a different person This isnt the first but..........this is the worst one Untraceable Once again I've become attatched so passionately to another Jus to disocover lies were covered, just like every other lover Your deception left my face smothered in tears, I can't believe Decieved for the last time, I need to concieve a way to some relief I was so naive, I couldn't percieve what was being done to me I recieved the worst feeling because I wore my heart on my sleve Grieving the one who decieved me, thought we had a sort of meaning Didn't think you'd be the one leaving, ya left my heart open and bleeding Nothing as it seems I guess, I don't know if i can handle all this distress Your heart was possesed to infect mine and it was done with such finesse I couldn't let it transgress, ya took me to the limit, its time for an apology I think I deserve one, its the least ya could do, when I gave ya all of me Swept off my feet, balance left wobboly, but nothings being said in regrets But don't forget, what goes around, will come around at its worst I bet For leaving me upset, I hope ya end up becoming a silhoutte of youself So ya can live on knowing ya hurt me, and it was the worst feeling I felt Chorus My feelings are at there worst because my heart has burst And now the tears emerse, im broken and this isnt the first Another hurts done.......from a different person This isnt the first but..........this is the worst one Mr Multie I aint gone lie it's intrigue'n me.............in love she was feelin me But it seems that the tendencies.......of the brain currupts memories All i want is for us to be...........its enough for this meanless being Til I came to conclusions.....like why the fuck i keep dream'n dreams See im livid, another page.................surpass'n my trouble'd days Un-seen to the concepts...................so i grasp'em in other ways The last of these ruckest games.......... everlast'n this fuck'n phase Trash'n these visions...............she's show'n passion to other names My feelins was outta place.......................an emotional dislocation Just a friend with priveliges........................ima social association Guess it was known from the make'n......... suppose to kno our places But she took everything from me......................a total depredation But over time...it corroded and molded........cuz it was my only option Everything i held true, was her, but all things fresh are soon to rotten Rose from depression, stress from the thorns, this un-needed nonesense Could careless if she cheated, just no harder pain then to be forgotten
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10-18-05, 07:46 PM
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Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 3240 794D
Let the feed commense........hmmmmm....i feel i came off differently from ya'll lmao but damn good from both of ya'll....
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10-18-05, 08:52 PM
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..Rv Sucks..
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IP: CE10 8C0C
haha dopenes.....i love the chorus i made....
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10-18-05, 09:13 PM
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IP: 3C00 FBBA
Werd, that shit was dope foreal
everyones verse was heat, i was leanin more towards untraceable and multies verses, but altogether each of yall kilt it, da chorus: 10/10 malicious --> 9/10 (u had a nice flow) untraceable --> 10/10 (da feelin was visual, nice choice of words) mr multies --> 10/10 (everythin was on point, u kept it real blunt) overall --> 12/10  dope
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10-18-05, 09:25 PM
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The Rise
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IP: 24BB 344D
i think the chorus just through it off and some lines in verses were mad stretched....but this was pretty decent...nice drop 7/10
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10-18-05, 09:28 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
A little something you all should work on...
Bonecollector still doesn't amaze me with his topicals. I found his verse monotonous, really, I don't know what he should work on, it just doesn't seem to click for me. Maybe ya should...check out some of my more recent dope shit...you have to have a nice storyline incorporated with a good emotional vocabulary teeming with imagery...I have my standards high. The topic isn't all that original, but oh well. Untraceable, I hate when people use more then like three syllable words that end in words like 'ation', it ruins it for me...it feels monotonous to me, like it's there to rhyme. You have to blend vocabulary with a good unpredictable rhyme...not shit like 'medication association decredation' and other words like that. Multi, that was pretty good. The whole dots kind of give me the semblance of a broken heart, because the gash down the middle. The rhymes you did were pretty basic but could, and as your name suggests you are fluent with multis. The rose metaphor was nice, something I would've thought up and I thought 'there should be a double meaning when you say rose' when I read it, and there you go. Great minds think alike; just kidding, I still rule topicals. 8/10. Good collab, but not the best I've seen. RTF on The Iron Pile... ...all of you! |
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10-18-05, 09:29 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
By the way, with that chorus, this line cuts off just to force the rhyme.
My feelings are at there worst because my heart has burst And now the tears emerse, im broken and this isnt the first Another hurts done.......from a different person This isnt the first but..........this is the worst one Probably should be 'tears emerge' as well. 'I'm broken and this isn't the first'. First what? You cut it off. |
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10-19-05, 12:23 AM
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Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 3240 794D
Thanx fo the feed everybody and Hadez i just thought i would throw something special in there with that meta ya kno i really didn't think too many people would catch on to it you must really be something at topicals so thas wassup plus that was only 40 mins work.....dont worry its not in excuse lol........but up'n for more feed
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10-19-05, 12:23 AM
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..Rv Sucks..
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IP: CE10 8C0C
i said first as in it wasnt the first time feeling/being broken...
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10-19-05, 03:26 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
wtf?
why you cunts gotta drop somthing this solid and not include me huh? fuck it. fuck your dope drop, why shoudl i feed somthing im not ionvolved in.. loldope drops cunts. could of been better  |
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10-19-05, 03:03 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
this would've been off the hook in first person but its all right nice imagetry keep up the good work
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10-19-05, 08:02 PM
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Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 3240 794D
continue the feed
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10-19-05, 08:10 PM
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IP: 31C2 62EB
word up this again and lol at ysdat
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10-19-05, 09:32 PM
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..Rv Sucks..
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IP: CE10 8C0C
haha
yeh ysdat thanks for the feed uppin for more feed yoh
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10-19-05, 10:05 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
MALICIOUS STOP ERASING MY POST YOU SOFT YOU WASN'T BORN IN THE HOOD YOU'LL HAVE BETTER SENSE HELL LEARN TO DROP IT LIKE IT'S HOT
Drop It Like It’s Hot Like P DIDDY in New York I see city but like a committee Beg for reports and pledge in courts for support what a pity In a dim mood need to improve my attitude drunk a glass Of wine, pave streets in gave heat guess I’m a brave freak Pass the gator aid, must act bad just can’t behave weak Got lame script on the same trip proper juice like doctor Seus Like birds they flock together true and hot forever with spruce Get quickly lyrical and glue your brains with sticky material no excuse A nerd blind and I’ll use birdlime to trap you don’t rap true Hip hop look I move some folks when I groove in quotes new Have to do a street march just to keep watch on crime Freak in the mind every time a glock is pulled or a nine Block is full of blind cats with designed gatts for killing Must maintain order and stop the lame slaughter of folks chilling Innocent as bystanders,// other problems emotions and strange force Can arrange a divorce sleeping with another chick a brother on course To become a trick looking for some quick pussy a one night stand Done hyped the man, now baby mama drama takes place no plan To raise a child but you crave wild for stray coo-chee now a low man Got involved no stout job just finance by chance after a hard hustle // If you sell drugs being a hell thug have to have yards of muscle Establish the facts of the matter how crack can shatter lives And scatter knives of destruction and serve a platter of bad vibes Flawless and proud but ran into a lawless crowd like a mob The type involved with crime this time wrong doorknob Some hardcore slobs coming at a bazaar pace sent by scar face Last edited by gladbag : 10-19-05 at 11:12 PM. |
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