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4 | 44.44% |
| I. Mind |
  
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5 | 55.56% |
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10-15-04, 08:27 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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I. Mind vs l.i.
IP: D448 A12A
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6 - 30 lines max No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 3-0 is ko Topic: Good While It Lasted... Good luck Minimum posts to vote: 200 Check in by: 10-15-04 at 08:57 PM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
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10-15-04, 08:27 PM
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IP: 08CF 169D
L.I. has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-04 08:27 PM.
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10-15-04, 08:28 PM
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IP: D448 A12A
I. Mind has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-04 08:28 PM.
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10-16-04, 01:22 PM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 08CF 169D
Remembrance and temperance as i struggle to control my senses...
Silently in pentance.. I never thought that fight would end this... How did I let it happen.. our relationship was buckled up, strapped in... Every guy that touched you i slapped him.. emotions got me rappin... All our memories as a couple.. amazing nights together i'd never forget... We were on a high pedistool, someone pulled the lever.. lost our step... You were sumtin unbelievable.. cant believe im leavin you... Now my pain is unrealivable.. you even got me grievin too... Gotta regain and maintain my confidence.. ill never be the same... Katie, Tasha, Whitney.. still, first thing comes to mind is your name... Could I ever get over you.. seems like the answer is predictable... I wanna go party and cling free.. but I feel as if I'm restricted to... Feeling surge in this.. think about comin back to me, no need to rush ya... Went from Dre and Pac to having me listen to R Kelly and Usher... I guess its better we move on.. theres other girls out there for me.. I gave up on your petty shit.. theres not a reason to ignore me... Moving on to new things.. Cupid no longer provokes us... Consider this my last love letter.. I'm over you and glad we broke up... I'm not saying it wasnt good.. it was great, but we were together from eight... It's just time to try new things.. out there, a beautiful girl awaits... The memories will always be here in my head.. & remain as a fun past time... We all have opinions on these things.. yall just heard me cast mine... |
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10-16-04, 03:41 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: AD17 224E
[My Paradise] It wasn't another ritual, misrable day... Writting my original, lyrical verse in my spiritual place.. This land had trees from the tallest to shortest.. Empty of tourist, Im alone in my own paradise forest... It's nice n private, it's quiet, more silent then slienced... A unknown creator behind it, Gods Heaven Defines it... This creation is what gives me my great inspirations... Empty of hate temptations, soul warmed by the insilation.. Had no preperations to have my eyes full of amazment... There is no replacement for the paradise im placed in... [Why I Will Never Leave] This is where I made my family, who show'd love back at me... When I would sadely go through tough struggles tragiclly... This is where i met my fiancee, my love, my true destiny... The person thats ment for me who'll always love me endlessly... This is my home, full of good and bad memories... And i'll never ever leave untill i reach the end of me... [A dream] It wasn't a regular nite, because of this terrible dream... Full of unforgetable, dreadfull things i wish i never seen.. What I dreamed felt like a vision, like a short preminition... Cuz I saw myself leavin paradise and wasn't my decision... Reasons Missin, woke up wit body temp. over 100 degrees... As if i jst survived a volcanic debree thats jst been released.... [Ashes] I open my eyes wider, realized im in the middle of a wild fire... Can't think, my eyes tired, see a tree so decide to climb higher.. I jump down the other side, right before the tree quickly clashes.. I ain't the only one scared,cuz as i run, an animal quickly passes.. Why did this have to happen, I really don't understand it... As I still panic, more trees to the ground loudly smashes... As i stand from far, memories in paradise slowly turns to ashes.. As I stand from far, I say to my self, "It was nice while it lasted"... |
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10-16-04, 03:57 PM
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Voted For: I. Mind
Mmmmmmm... To Me This Battle Was Kinda One Sided... L.I.'s Verse Was To Basic A Concept For Me... I Liked Mind's Creativity... Her Flow Was Better To Making The Read Easier... Her Imagery Stood Out Alot More... She Brought Us Into Her Everything And Set Every Detail Needed Right Into Our Laps... Very Nice Drop... .One. Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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10-16-04, 04:17 PM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
Voted For: L.I.
wow some deep stuff from the both of you. LI-nice verse. i really liked it. your flow was definitely on point and all of your lines were basically even. you had very good vocab which helped me to see the picture in my head of what you were going through. i liked that line about dre and pac to r. kelly and usher. this verse was good cause i could relate to it. you used a lot of words that helped paint a picture in my mind. overall 9/10 I.Mind-i like the way that you went about writing your verse. a lot of people would definitely write about a lost love or something along those lines but you approached it differently. that was good. i liked the words you used and your flow was good. this was sorta more of a poem to me. i like the way you divided it into different sections for different phases. good flow and structure. nothing was forced and everything flowed smoothly. overall 9/10 my vote is going to LI jus because i could relate to his verse more. I Mind you had a really good verse too but i could feel LI' verse more cause i know what its like vote-LI |
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10-16-04, 04:57 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: AD17 224E
uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin vv
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10-16-04, 05:08 PM
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Umm...Yeah
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IP: 5043 32F4
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you type "uppin" a lot  and that is wooooooord
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10-16-04, 05:37 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: AD17 224E
lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol.. lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol.. lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..lol..
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10-16-04, 06:01 PM
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Umm...Yeah
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IP: 5043 32F4
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you laugh a lot dooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooope
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10-16-04, 08:51 PM
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This was feedback posted for I. Mind
IP: ABE5 5A5C
im just uppin not voting
im just uppin not voting
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10-16-04, 11:22 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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This was feedback posted for L.I.
IP: 5043 32F4
i liked L.I's coplez with the vocabulary in the middles of his verse but i mind had a dope style n shit i cant vote tho..but L.I will win I mind had good flow and stucture L.I didn't so w/e
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10-16-04, 11:35 PM
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Voted For: I. Mind
vote:I Mind L.I. your strucure was ok but not apropriate for topiacls the vocab was good but it ruined your flow for da 1st couplealines but the feeling in it was sick I liked how it got better throughout the story...but the one thing that ruined is the structure...still sick though I.Mind you went perfect on this... structure was topical like... the stroyloike them to it gave it a talib kweli like aura the vocab made it seem more lik a veteran in rap wrote it... really feelin this... good battle vote/I.Mind
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10-16-04, 11:38 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin
i don't even think L.I. tried 
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