You know the rules...
Consider this my check in...
Good luck, homie...

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aight aight checking in also

will drop asap

Your chasing victory.. and It's playing Hard to get
I'm tempted to end your career... but it hasn't started yet
Your style Is trash... Put Your Life In Tha Past, Cuz You Goin No Where Fast
GaZeeBo Gonna Ignite And Blast At This Fag Wit A Shitty Style Thats Half Assed
I'll Defeat Your Animated Style To Leave Your Corps Annihilated
Your styles Out Dated Never Phazin, Im Higher Rated Wit Sick Flows thats highly hated
My flow Is cold Duke, your oppostition Is To Fold Fool.. Battlin Me Was A BOLD Move
In This Battle Your Hittin Rock Bottom Like Skydivers Wit No Chutes
My flows all Despise and Compose your Demise, leave Acid Tears Fallen to burn Holes in your Eyes
I'm hearin your Moans and your Cries,This Kid chose the disguise of Tryin to be Straight but Never sayin no to the guys
Your Diminutive skills are Droppin your Fade quick, cant stop me so Face it
So stop Being Basic you couldn't Dodge my Punches if you were caught in the Matrix

hope that gets it done

edited for spelling and font size

My intent 2 invent intense disses in this sentence
Will make my victory sort of like your crew name.....Instant!
Plus the god is coming to spout, nothin’ but clout
I would say your dick-less.....But you have one in your mouth!
I’m the king with no crown, that nothin’ is harming
Your verse is like a clock with no sound...nothin’ alarming!
You are not enough to quench the essence of my thirst
So the 45th will leave you leaning like the letters of my verse!
I’ll make u famous wit this, cause I drop flame when I spit
You accepted the battle...
but you should have kept moving, like the names in ya sig!

Wit lives...
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Edited cause i couldnt read that small font...
You went over the line limit...
Its all good though, homie
Good luck...

-W1

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its only 12 when u look at it

but i did go over ...but it does look like 18 lines when its 12

my bad

lets get some votes in this bitch

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ok decent battle here...nothing spitacular but none the less
its was aight


Gazeebo...i did like the multis n shit but alot were forced and not needed..
punches were a bit played....and so is your style..structure was off and flow fell
in some areas...a lot of your punches would have hit harder if worded better..and
your verse had a lot of filler too..focus on your oponent not yourself..it hurts your verse

wicked...actually came pretty decent.i like the flow and structure was on point...
some punches were blah..while others stood out in some cases...
overall you had the better verse..and was more creative..

favorite line of battle goes to wicked

I’m the king with no crown, that nothin’ is harming
Your verse is like a clock with no sound...nothin’ alarming!

cracked a smile here..not bad...

anyway
v/w1cked

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Gazeebo threw a good, flowing verse...

But alot of punches were softened by all those multi's...

I keep seeing it over and over again...

It's really fuckin hard to have a multi-ridden punchline...

The set ups, ok, yeah...

But when the punchline is multi'ed up...

I swear, 99 outta 100 times, it's weak as shit.

That was the problem here.
That and the stretched lines...

So, forget about multi-ing your opponenet to death...

Work on setups and punches.

Wicked was short and sweet, structure and flow on mark...
(and he didn't need scores of multi's to do it)

Plus, he got personal on ya, always helps.

Tight wordplay, really, he just killed this.

Peace

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hmmm...vote wicked...

gazeeba u tried too hard with the multies...dont try to win battles
with multies...
wicked came with old concepts but
they were good enought to win here
straight battle that deserves honest vote...Wicked...

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Anon

Thanks for voting...
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-W1

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if i could vote it would be for GaZeeBo cause he had good flow and structure
but what do i know

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^Better structure and flow?...
Up number 3...

-W1

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Both of you have lots of filler in your verses. GaZeeBo has more filler however and that is what lost him this battle. W1CKED's set up line for each punch was filler, but his use of similies in his punches made up for the filler.

Will make my victory sort of like your crew name.....Instant!
I would say your dick-less.....But you have one in your mouth!
^Nice punches made up for the filler. GaZeeBo, you need to stop using so many multis, it makes your verse almost sing-songy and lessens the impact of your punches. W1CKED, you have some skill, try to lose some of the filler in your set up and add more punches.

Vote=W1CKED.

Vote.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108919

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