yo, yo, its one mic, no, you cant follow this
im one of the best in rap, so sit down and try and acknowledge it
im spittin underground, fuck all these mainstream cats
cuz they spittin mainly aimless crap, and need to change they raps
im statin the facts, act tough and i'll be knockin' you out
cuz when i battle, its obvious i'll be on top of the bout
im sick of these guys on the net tryin to act tough
like luda, imma knock you down, and not help you stand up
stop trynna be nice, cuz i'll come and lyrically rip you up
these haters is pussy, they too scared to make they pistols bust
im nice with raps, spittin lyrical fire on wax
my record may not luk gud, but imma fight the facts
y'all cant get wit my lines, any haters, im splittin they spine
sick when i rhyme, just gimme a mic, and watch me light the track
imma keep elevatin, and raisin my game till im dead
i don't gotta "ryde ruff" for me to "aim for the head"

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uppin this shit.............

my rhyme scheme switches up near the end aswell, just so you know

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im spittin underground, fuck all these mainstream cats
cuz they spittin mainly aimless crap, and need to change they raps
im statin the facts, act tough and i'll be knockin' you out
cuz when i battle, its obvious i'll be on top of the bout

Yo Dem Linez Wuz Coo' Hommie


stop trynna be nice, cuz i'll come and lyrically rip you up
these haters is pussy, they too scared to make they pistols bust

Dats my Favorite Bar Tho! Nice Gangsta Freestyle Yo!! Return Da Feedback On My Freestyle Plz!

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It's On & Poppin, Baby

yo, thanx for the feed man, appreciate it big time. uppin this.............

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overall this was a cool piece.

im spittin underground, fuck all these mainstream cats
cuz they spittin mainly aimless crap, and need to change they raps

that was ur best bar cause everything else was about killing someone. or knocking them out. you had a good flow when i read. the structure was quite even. better from the last time i seen anything from you.




please leave feed on the link in my sig.

thanx for the feed man. uppin this................

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