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Old 06-22-08, 11:43 PM   #1
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Kirk ( 6 ) vs. Ramcees ( 4 )

IP: EBB4 6039

Due times:
Check in due Wednesday 11.59pm EST.
- if you don't check in by this time, and you DO end up posting, -2 votes.
Verses due by Friday 11.59pm EST. Yeah, that's eastern. not pacific.
Lateness = -2 votes even IF your opponent allows you to post late.
Max. extension = 24 hours, to be granted by your opponent.

Line limits:
10 min and 20 max. for regular battles. 16 min and no max in champ matches. If no line limit agreed, second battler to post must match first battler. But ultimately, first battler gets to set the line number by how much he posts.

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Old 06-23-08, 04:40 AM   #2
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Check. Goodluck. I'm prolly going 16, that cool?
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Old 06-23-08, 03:24 PM   #3
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check, yeah 16 sounds good
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Old 06-25-08, 09:21 PM   #4
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Goodluck.




You're no Challenger. Just ain't up to Caliber with my jots, man.
I shoot the punches like Magnums too quick for your Dodge, Ram,
Guy rams boy dicks. Don't play games? You sit on the joystick,
You're the gayest dude I've ever come across... Who enjoyed it.
Honestly, bro. You get on pussy. Why? Simple, you must suck,
Because last time you hit a g spot, they beat you the fuck up.
Rolls with bitches. My crew? We're the Horsemen, Cee remembers,
Cause I've seen you spit our name out... Missin' the first 3 letters.
What's your gameplan? Come chargin' at me hopin' to score?
I got a remedy for Ram's tactics...... Just open the door,
Wish you'd drop first for inspiration so you could save my spit,
Cause I could read your fucking verse and it would make me sick,
Ram ain't gangster doin' jail time. Please let this noise end,
The only one who's clarified you're inmate is your boyfriend.
And Ya sig. must be anticipating your anger when this gay gets sank,
Cause if I flip up my finger after this battle. It's what place I ranked.
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Old 06-27-08, 02:08 PM   #5
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plz grant me an ext. ill drop as soon as i wake up (im sick n tired)
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Old 06-27-08, 02:49 PM   #6
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Extension granted. Verse due by Saturday Midnight.
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Old 06-28-08, 12:56 PM   #7
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kirk fuck it man..I don’t know any good nameplays to stomp it
but it surely rolled off my tongue…a lot quicker then ur mom did
shit, I could do this with my eyes closed, cuz damn dis gay aint Hot
After this ill get labelled: Easy……for sleeping my way to the Top
ill make ya eyes roll to the back of ya skull, when I spit this just right
n then u wont just look stupid…ull even know what stupid looks like
yeah I don’t fuck around, but hey! white ass, is perfect for Squashing
so ima leave ya whole fukin crew…looking like a pedestrian crossing
Ima keep stomping, cuz u cant run with da pros, u shoulda no showed
cus the last time this bitch tried to run Hot…his bath tub, over flowed
no homo, u aint wanted in this league, kirk your styles a Fucking Joke
cats only paying u respects…cuz your verse resembled, a Suicide Note
so plz don’t, underestimate what I wrote, ill crush all ya Rookie hopes
but of course u stand a chance kirk… im only known for droppin Dopes
see id treat his verse like rubbish, but that wont severely hurt dis clown
plus the instructions left below it, suggest we simply…..burn it down
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Old 06-28-08, 01:05 PM   #8
Kirk
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Sick drop, bro.
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Old 06-28-08, 11:01 PM   #9
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Here's my vote.

Kirk

You're no Challenger. Just ain't up to Caliber with my jots, man.
I shoot the punches like Magnums too quick for your Dodge, Ram,

Ha I like that bar.

Guy rams boy dicks. Don't play games? You sit on the joystick,
You're the gayest dude I've ever come across... Who enjoyed it.

[b]Meh. Could of hit harder.


Honestly, bro. You get on pussy. Why? Simple, you must suck,
Because last time you hit a g spot, they beat you the fuck up.

Haha, shit is fuckin good.

Rolls with bitches. My crew? We're the Horsemen, Cee remembers,
Cause I've seen you spit our name out... Missin' the first 3 letters.

Nice personal.

What's your gameplan? Come chargin' at me hopin' to score?
I got a remedy for Ram's tactics...... Just open the door,

Eh..I see what was intended bu coulda been done differently.

Wish you'd drop first for inspiration so you could save my spit,
Cause I could read your fucking verse and it would make me sick,

Nice shit

Ram ain't gangster doin' jail time. Please let this noise end,
The only one who's clarified you're inmate is your boyfriend.

Haha. Nice.

And Ya sig. must be anticipating your anger when this gay gets sank,
Cause if I flip up my finger after this battle. It's what place I ranked.

Decent close.


Ramcees

kirk fuck it man..I don’t know any good nameplays to stomp it
but it surely rolled off my tongue…a lot quicker then ur mom did

Loosely rhymed, kind meh.

shit, I could do this with my eyes closed, cuz damn dis gay aint Hot
After this ill get labelled: Easy……for sleeping my way to the Top

Haha. I like, I like.

ill make ya eyes roll to the back of ya skull, when I spit this just right
n then u wont just look stupid…ull even know what stupid looks like

Good, good.

yeah I don’t fuck around, but hey! white ass, is perfect for Squashing
so ima leave ya whole fukin crew…looking like a pedestrian crossing

Don't really get it.

Ima keep stomping, cuz u cant run with da pros, u shoulda no showed
cus the last time this bitch tried to run Hot…his bath tub, over flowed

Okay.

no homo, u aint wanted in this league, kirk your styles a Fucking Joke
cats only paying u respects…cuz your verse resembled, a Suicide Note

Don't really get it.

so plz don’t, underestimate what I wrote, ill crush all ya Rookie hopes
but of course u stand a chance kirk… im only known for droppin Dopes

Is that a compliment? Not a bad bar though.

see id treat his verse like rubbish, but that wont severely hurt dis clown
plus the instructions left below it, suggest we simply…..burn it down

Decent close.


OVERALL:

This battle was SO hard. Seriously. I had to read, then re-read, then RE-READ to get a winner. It was close but I gotta give the slight nod to Kirk. Ramcees had the beginning but started to falter just a little and Kirk stayed more consistent. Both had good flow and form, good personals, good punches. It was truly a marvel to read. This could have gone either way, but that slight ip in Ramcees's verse gave it to Kirk.

VOTE: Kirk
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Old 06-29-08, 09:29 AM   #10
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You're no Challenger. Just ain't up to Caliber with my jots, man.
I shoot the punches like Magnums too quick for your Dodge, Ram,
^worded nicely, solid.
Guy rams boy dicks. Don't play games? You sit on the joystick,
You're the gayest dude I've ever come across... Who enjoyed it.
^ehhhhhhh
Honestly, bro. You get on pussy. Why? Simple, you must suck,
Because last time you hit a g spot, they beat you the fuck up.
^haha, solid.
Rolls with bitches. My crew? We're the Horsemen, Cee remembers,
Cause I've seen you spit our name out... Missin' the first 3 letters.
^haha
What's your gameplan? Come chargin' at me hopin' to score?
I got a remedy for Ram's tactics...... Just open the door,
^not feelin' it, at all...
Wish you'd drop first for inspiration so you could save my spit,
Cause I could read your fucking verse and it would make me sick,
^ha, simple though
Ram ain't gangster doin' jail time. Please let this noise end,
The only one who's clarified you're inmate is your boyfriend.
^haha, alright
And Ya sig. must be anticipating your anger when this gay gets sank,
Cause if I flip up my finger after this battle. It's what place I ranked.
^meh, decent closer

^^overall, decent verse, stayed fairly consistent though the verse, minus a couple lines which didn't really seem to fit in, solid drop.

kirk fuck it man..I don’t know any good nameplays to stomp it
but it surely rolled off my tongue…a lot quicker then ur mom did
^haha, solid.
shit, I could do this with my eyes closed, cuz damn dis gay aint Hot
After this ill get labelled: Easy……for sleeping my way to the Top
^nah
ill make ya eyes roll to the back of ya skull, when I spit this just right
n then u wont just look stupid…ull even know what stupid looks like
^had potential, didn't connect
yeah I don’t fuck around, but hey! white ass, is perfect for Squashing
so ima leave ya whole fukin crew…looking like a pedestrian crossing
^not feelin it
Ima keep stomping, cuz u cant run with da pros, u shoulda no showed
cus the last time this bitch tried to run Hot…his bath tub, over flowed
^basic
no homo, u aint wanted in this league, kirk your styles a Fucking Joke
cats only paying u respects…cuz your verse resembled, a Suicide Note
^no
so plz don’t, underestimate what I wrote, ill crush all ya Rookie hopes
but of course u stand a chance kirk… im only known for droppin Dopes
^i didn't like the wording, had potench though
see id treat his verse like rubbish, but that wont severely hurt dis clown
plus the instructions left below it, suggest we simply…..burn it down
^didn't like the wording, basic anyways

^^overall, i though ramcees didn't quite drop that well, to me, nothing really connected too hard, or left me saying "shit, nice haha", it was an alright read, but it was basic at best....

v/kirk, harder hitting punches overall
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Old 06-29-08, 11:27 AM   #11
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There verses have been broke down enough..I broke em down the other day but I x'd out of my page, so I'm not gonna break em down again. lol, I had Ram havin 4 meh punches an kirk havin 2..although Ram had some funny lines, he lacked the consistency that Kirk came with. Ram ya carried a decent swagger all the way through..toss in some wp, an make sure each punch connects, liek your payin respects line was decent concepts..but it didn't make sense hsi verse resembled a suicide note. Kirk your opener was eh..you had a few more that weren't hard hittin..like open the door line was meh as well. Both need to pick it up for next week imo. Decent showin by both, but neither of yours best.

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Old 06-30-08, 05:28 AM   #12
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Kirk wins 3 votes to none.

Kirk ( 9 ) and Ramcees ( 3 )
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