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08-14-06, 09:14 PM | #1 | ||||
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Love Life
IP: A4DD AA44
"Love Life" You would love life if your life was filled with love this is exactly what that wonderful feeling doese shell fill your life with love, and put love in ya life she can be the rain of dreams thats flooding your night She Opens up your chest like she holds the key to ya heart love is blind and she'll be the bright light that you see in the dark get you net ready cause she puts them butterflies in ya stomach so much love you'll wanna die for this woman And it seems as if she'll do the same at this moment in time shes that gust of wind that turns ya lame floating to flyin Her words will romance your thoughts and swooth ya mind she leave you lost and its so easy for her to move ya time You'll think you got love nailed, and build a sense of security You'll learn to see she can heal all wounds verbally She'll speak the perfect words at that perfect moment Her love dont cost a buck but you'll still feel like you own it But that happily ever after dont come for free that happily ever after dont come for free willing to pay any price But soon youll see that happily ever after has the ultimate fee You would wanna die if your life was filled with love this is exactly what that terrible feeling doese she'll fill your life with hate, and put hate in ya life she'll awake you at night, shes the mistake that you like now youll work every day at payin the price keeping her she talks with lies and your believin her seeping words she keeps a hold on your soul and lives in your mind you fold when she goese and just try to give it some time she comes back when your the last choice to be chosen wanna take it to the next level but you stuck on the loading screen and she never stops playin these games with ya heart it feels the same as the start her actions are rearanged ya thoughts leavin you wondering what if this isn't really ment to be and its hard to see another dude kissin your destiny when she gets hurt your the guy she comes runnin to until finally you get tired of it and tell her im done with you done with you lookin in my direction while seein another guy like a lazy eye done bein this stupid safty guy no longer will you make me cry seein the truth in the way you lie you played with my life and lost so today ill die and if every word that comes out of her mouth isnt nothin but lies you should consider your self one of the luckiest guys ive had no luck with girls but i still reluctantly try if every word that comes out of her mouth isnt nothin but lies you should consider your self on of the luckiest guys ive had no luck with girls but i still relucklently try thoughts of the past girls keeps me rubbing my eyes there all the reasons why im no longer loving my life but i thank the girls cause they gave me somthin to write Links Coming Soon
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08-14-06, 09:18 PM | #2 | ||||
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08-14-06, 09:22 PM | #3 | ||||
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08-15-06, 08:21 AM | #4 | ||||
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IP: A4DD AA44
Uppin For Some Damn Feed
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08-15-06, 09:26 PM | #5 | |||||
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IP: FD88 2D69
nice rhyme my dude definenelt keep it up with the topical songs on here alrite........
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08-16-06, 06:33 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 3EAC B99E
Thanks For The Feed Homie
Uppin For More Yo
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08-21-06, 12:41 AM | #7 | ||||
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IP: B5DD E19F
Uppin For More Feed Damn This Site Is Dead Now
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08-28-06, 11:20 AM | #8 | ||||
oh yea?
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IP: 8CEC 91CB
not bad man, had some cool lines and overall this was solid, i think your main problem is wording, some of these lines just werent worded well, it has nothing to do with your vocab and what words you used its how you used them, it just didnt come off natural and shit. but keep dropping dude. hit up my sweet dreams piece if you can
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09-04-06, 10:05 PM | #9 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
decent.
Enjoyed the read, certain bars I would of worded diffrently, but your style is yours. Good vocab and solid concept, stay dropping bro. |
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09-12-06, 10:03 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: BB6E EC88
That shit was NICE keep that up i enjoyed readin that and if you make that an audio its gonna be on my iPod! I can relate to your words somethings could have been changed but the way you switched up the hook after the first verse was fire keep that up. 8.7/10
Go peep Drained Emotions by me just click search and search the OM forums for LexiKon
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09-13-06, 01:10 AM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: C0C3 BD3A
i liked these two lines in the frist verse
She Opens up your chest like she holds the key to ya heart love is blind and she'll be the bright light that you see in the dark and i liked the emotion in the second verse and this is so true that you can be blinded by love |
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09-13-06, 07:46 AM | #12 | |||||
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IP: 860D ECBB
This was nice really liked the opening bars,...
You would love life if your life was filled with love this is exactly what that wonderful feeling doese shell fill your life with love, and put love in ya life she can be the rain of dreams thats flooding your night Dope Nice flow vocab was nice can be up-ed a little everyones can to be fair... Concept was nice. And this was a good read I enjoyed it. Stay up 1~ |
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09-14-06, 03:31 PM | #13 | ||||||
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IP: F7E3 42B8
this was really good... flow was good... i think could use some more complex language... not that it really matters but it makes people look clever lol
anyways this was a nice piece... good work... |
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