tae- just added tha lor
i dont gotta prove shit when i spit barz
cause these niggaz get lost in my flo like a trip 2 marz
i buss arz
im on tha top of tha chart
and i aint lookin 4 no beef so haters dont start
i buss these niggaz headz on wallz
fuk virgin mobile they can drop tha calls
i stay pack wit heat like tha people get jammed in mallz
thats a waste of time
bitch niggaz dont hate on mine
polish me up itz tay time 2 shine


i hope yall feelin this i did this quik it waz a little sample

feedback please

umm hey you wanna battle? ill set it up just messages Big_O

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say it in english ^^^ and i dont have 20 posts yet..............

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yall like my gangsta rapper in tha corner????????????

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Vocabulary: Work on it
Flow: okay
Structure: Work on it
Concept: Work on it
Topic: Work on it
Favorite Lines: Nothing
Rating: 4/10
Advice: This is bad even for a freestyle. No originality, nothing sticks out , nothing quotable, you had no good wordplay and your punches were lacking, as was your vocabulary. Elevate.

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thanks 4 tha props and i will step my game up..........

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def elivate... this one didnt stick out too me either.

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ok buddy...............................

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let's see...........
flow- okay, but shaky at times.....
structure-n/a
topic- basic self-glorification, which iz ok for a free, but u didn't do anything with it........
fav. lines: none really stuck out.........

overall 2/10: srry bout the low grade, but this needs elevation on more than one level...... try to work on a topic, then up your vocab....... an OM isn't all about punches, but for a battle you're gonna have to step your game up........

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

my poetry:
untitled

ok.....................

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it waz okay but imma have a new open mic called b-i-t-c-h-e-s
look out 4 that shit

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,Bad structure,the flow was ok,Punches that standedd out"none",Vocab wasnt good,the smilie faces need to be takin out...and i dont like these concepts for OMs...not original.

man...you need work.First off....actually TRY and make shit flow.U were fucking basic.Don't make one line so long then the one after soooo short.Cause then it sounds fucked up.And as for ur content...well...I don't even wanna talk about that