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Old 05-10-07, 04:38 PM   #1
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Lost (SICK story track)

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Sick story track, somethin' different from my usual style of music..Quality is a bit ehh because of some equipment problems, but what the fuck ever..

Left feed on a bunch of shit..Links are coming soon.
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Old 05-10-07, 04:43 PM   #2
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i love this beat, you do it?
killer opening line gets you hooked right in right away
the hookish thing was so so....didnt do justice to the first verse....second verse isnt as quite as good as the first for me...but i like how you ended that verse....
feels like alot of beat left....collab.? if not you did good with expressing the feelings...needs a solid hook, and one more verse maybe....good shit tho

rtf on good morning
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Old 05-10-07, 04:43 PM   #3
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Old 05-10-07, 10:46 PM   #4
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feeling the mood and the story of the track, lyrics are on point, and ur flow fits the emotion. i like the vibe of this track, idk personally i like deep tracks alot. u did a good job of allowing the listener to connect to the character in the song. good job.
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Old 05-11-07, 10:49 AM   #5
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I can relate to a lot of what thsi is saying and I felt like I had a connection with the person you were depictin in the story.....the beat is off the chain....the flow is on point.....the lyrics is straight.....good shit homie, stay up
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Old 05-12-07, 01:22 PM   #6
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'Preciate the feedback, leave links and I'll hit them up.
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Old 05-12-07, 07:55 PM   #7
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man...ur HIGHS are killin my EARS!

like the gritty/grimey sound of your voice on this beat


sounds personal

obviously u need better mixing...but I like the sound/tone of the track


not bad bro



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Old 05-13-07, 01:20 AM   #8
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yo that shit u sent been done since yesterday holla at me........
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Old 05-14-07, 03:17 PM   #9
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you do have the blackest voice I ever heard from a white dude lol, pretty dope man, flow is cool, quality is not that bad pretty good actually, made a track on this beat before, I love it, nice emotion, the lyrics are good but heard this style of track to much, talking bout someone into drugs and all you know but still good IMO, oh that was short lol, well good track man , 8.5/10

Keep it up

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Old 05-16-07, 10:41 PM   #10
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like i said before...

...im likin the story, good vibe to it too...of course the quality is off...i feel like i got ripped off tho cuz i wanted mroe lol...good lyrics and flow and everything...only thign i would suggest would be makin it a lil longer and obviuosly fixin up that quality...otherwise, nice
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