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Old 10-21-05, 06:25 AM   #1
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My Fight With The Champ..

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As I walk to the ring I'm not nervous...in fact I feel a little cocky
Cuz I feel like God himself could try and challenge me and couldn't stop me
This match has been in the makings for months, not many people gave me a chance
I step through the ropes and show off my hand and foot speed with a dance
I hear a cheer from the crowd, I see the champ walking in
I ignore his entry music and continue shadowboxing
The introductions and staredown are a blur, I'm just ready to get started
This man has ridiculed me in the media, I'm bout to show him where my heart is
The first round I come out strong, got my head moving and I'm sticking the jab
He throws his first punch, hits me in the jaw...I take it and laugh
I'm unstoppable, there's no way I am losing this fight
The crowd is slowly starting to support me, TONIGHT is MY NIGHT
As each round goes it's back and forth, the champs not ready to give up his reign
I'm losing stamina but I'm still determined to bring the pain
Then in a burst of energy I give him a 1-2 that knocks him back
A short flurry later he's in the corner dazed, I have him trapped
My cornermen start yelling "You can do it, you're gonna win"
I took a little time to look at the tv camera and grin
That right there was my big mistake, the beginning of the end
Cuz right then the champ hit me with an uppercut to the chin
A right then a left and I found myself down on the canvas
Looking up at the ref I said "Help, I've been ambushed"
"It was 7 or 8 of them with baseball bats, looking crazy demented"
But then I realized what really happened once I came to my senses
I made it up before the 10 count but my knees were wobbly and weak
After the final bell, "good fight" were the only words I could speak
I sat down on the stool so worn out I could hardly budge
Knowing that my fate now lay in the hands of each judge
The announcer speaks and tells the crowd that the first judge gave the fight to me
My eyes are swelling shut making it hard to see but I'm starting to get happy
The second judge burst my bubble he gave the fight to the champ
Dammit he's ruining everything I wish I had Aladdin's genie lamp
So I could wish for victory but magic isn't the name of the game
The third judges' decision is said, and the winner is Bizzo, and this was my claim to fame
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Old 10-21-05, 09:25 PM   #2
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ok this was a good piece. the imagery was definitely there although if you upped your vocab you coulda created a greater level of emotion. flow was ok though. overall this was a decent piece.
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Old 10-21-05, 11:44 PM   #3
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