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Fully equipped with a handful of peanuts
To hurl at your Granny while shes sucking your Grandfathers penis
I'm a cow tipper, profanity rhyme spitter
When i drop this shit in audio i'll cut you up like 'Jack the Ripper'
Each lines a filler! A whole pile of lyrical sick
Which amounts to nothing other than yellowy brown vomit
Regurgitation, national abombination
The worlds in a state of hate I'm just another donation
Burning sensation, guys like me better than masturbation!
Just me, myself and I such an intense collaberation
To feed the generation, alcohol fuelled machine
I could pull out a banana, and still get you all to scream
I been described many times as the definition of extreme
This pussy ain't into milk, shes the cat who got the cream
Freestylin stops ya whining every cloud has a silver lining
But if you can see the good in me..then shit, i'll give up rhymin.



once again, a quick randon freestyle..erm...yeah..ok..see what you come up with.

yo, my guns dont weigh 4 pounds they weigh a metric ton
they not the size of 50 or bowwow thay the size of big pun
and the shells do damage they dont only polk through
they leave holes in yo body big enough to walk through
i come up to yo crib wit the night gear
flick on the switch and the inf beam appear
load up, cock back, make sure the room is clear
then i leave yo brains hangin on the ceiling like a chandalier
i wont hesitate i play my part
like vin diesel i show you what tears a man apart
you get a little chain and bracelet so what you wanna floss
i'll take yo shit shoot yo adams apple and turn it into apple sauce
Im good wit the guns but I'm better wit my hands
I take you or any one of yo mans
dont matter who it is you claim to be an enemy
i duck dodge weave and hit you so many times you'll think there was ten of me
when my hands swell up thats when i cause the most harm
i'll tear off yo limbs and beat you wit yo own arms
hit you wit the fifth leave you bloody like a bitch wit her period
cock back and put an end to you point blank period...........

HollA BacK

er..your supposed to post your ryhmes in your own thread..not take over mine...

Can i have feedback on my drop pleez??

whats going on?

yo wrote some real crazy shit
but it was tight kinda confusing

could tell it was a keystyle....flow was choppy....off and on..the topic was vague...wasnt really feeling this... some nice vocab in there...and wierd shit..lol..... overall not too good....ok i suppose...but....pZ

i like all right. its funny you know. but it is a little vauge and its sounds like your just writting what ever comes to mind. tey taking some more time. if you get a chance review my chapter one. thanks.

that was the point of this piece something quick first thing that pops into your head..i mean..the title sez it all!

lol but thanks for the feed!

Flow was chopped up a bit...you can tell it was a freestyle because it kinda lingered off whatever topic it had... it was okay and had good vocab

6/10

Fully equipped with a handful of peanuts
To hurl at your Granny while shes sucking your Grandfathers penis
^^^
ROTFLMMFAO.... NICE SETUP lmfao... damn shyt was funny

i like funny spits ppl make up like this

9/10 kid... good ish

Caesar on3

thank you..my head is full of fucked up random thoughts

erm..