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06-29-05, 11:12 PM | #1 | |||||
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Remembering those summer nights Watching the skies dance and smells of rain on the horizon Not knowing this would be a future reflection of what would come to me Clouds pregnant with lies, promises made to be broken Love taken light heartedly and away from me Banished from within and Suddenly she’s lost without a trace of existence Besides what is left within the realms of my conscious Full of promises of love for lifetimes Watching your disappearing act attempting to alter and destroy lives As if you owned the cold souls of those who once loved You unconditionally Wishing memories would fade of you so these emotions Would not rot from within Your lack of existence tore through Our lives like a directionless twister Reeking havoc on innocence No warnings or signs of your true Judgment Living life through your eyes of Oppression With thoughts of leaving screaming through your Soul And then she magically appears Without a trace of yesterday’s storms Cloudless skies of blue Clear and Clean Like thoughts of being unseen, invisible and invincible She acts as if her storm has not caused a Chaotic Confusion and sufferings from her Mental Contusions when her skies darkened Swelled with lies and disbeliefs of her inner propaganda She laughs as if her rain didn’t flood our hearts With hurt, hope, fear and pride turning into hate As if she didn’t pump us with insecurities to hide Her weakness through our fears and run from the Truth Claiming her visions are pure as fresh snow From a polluted sky Full of impurities Misleading one’s mind’s eye to show her filth That has tore down what we fought to build Bringing those thoughts to fruition Making us remember her storms without warning Causing damage and pain that never has come to an End. Feeling the need for Her reparations of the damage That She dragged us through, No apologies It’s become something we needed to accept So I’ve made it my muse to amend this pain While it continues to rot from within Not expecting her to be all she should be... Its too bad this woman really is supposed to be a mother to me.
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06-30-05, 12:38 AM | #2 | |||||
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BuMp, BuMp, BuMp...
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06-30-05, 12:56 AM | #3 | |||||
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Well....I thought this poem was good I haven't seen any of your other stuff so this surprised me...I think your imagery throughout was very good you have a lot of descriptive details...then your emotion is also good in this piece along with the storyline that you had....Overall i believe this is a very good piece keep it up
and please.....RTF on my poem thanks...http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=197312
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06-30-05, 06:26 AM | #4 | |||||
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BuMp, BuMp, BuMp, I WiLl ReAd YoUrS vErY sOoN!
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07-01-05, 07:41 PM | #5 | |||||
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BuMp BuMp BuMp!
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