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06-10-07, 02:02 PM | #1 | |
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The Worlds Demise
IP:
The Worlds Demise
I walk alone out of my house a dark place broken windows a brick tossed is all the memories of this hate! I cross the boardwalk and look up to have a hot spring across my face all i get is the darkness of clouds for no Sun will shine in our fate demise I wonder I feel the wind breezy im torn up inside feelings are forgotten,hateful relationships are made jumps and muggings,fatal stabbings,murders and police we were suppost to elevate and move on but not with these character traits I no longer kill but I should of never lived demise and power the smell of envy overtakes my will i no longer stand I collaps to a sound a clap across the rotatating sircumfrence of the world the waters of rivers,take me in I no longer breathe a breath of life,life to cry,living is a synonym to die To be Continued |
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06-14-07, 03:49 PM | #2 | |
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IP:
good short written it was deep....deep in thought..... ~1~
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07-04-07, 03:13 PM | #3 | |
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IP:
this was good mang. i liked your way of writin this. favorite line-all i get is the darkness of clouds
for no Sun will shine in our fate thats deep mang... if u get the chance peep mine n give me sum constructive criticism, since im new to this angel of mine-deluzional |
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07-24-07, 05:56 PM | #4 | ||
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IP:
I like it better then sum but still has a lil bit of choppy ness in it and i lose track! But it was really deep!
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