lyricly gifted rapper that spitten with his tounge twisted.
originally lifting every bodys vision of suspicion.
no terms or reason to stop under any condition.
i got no definition or meaning of the word competion.
words full of wishing not seeing the vision
of my mission that follows the intercision.
written lines in my kitchen, constantly spitten.
everyday and night man its constantly bitchen.
given a gift so im gifted with out given.
but spitten is a gift so am i given whats gifted?
i envision the intercision of double vision itermission.
there for, my decision of intermission is twice of double vision.

drop links later 2v

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Liked this small piece man, enjoyed reading it. Obviously needs to be abit longer, but decent usage of wordplay.Not much else to say really but quality lil piece.


Peace

it was ight, u kept sayin abuncha rhymes twice
i dont kno about these other peeps but i dont like hearin it to much
good idea of usin all the rhymy words tho
6/10

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"lyricly gifted rapper that spitten with his tounge twisted.
originally lifting every bodys vision of suspicion.
no terms or reason to stop under any condition.
i got no definition or meaning of the word competion."

hot

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point was to make it a big multi. as many words as i could with the same rhyme scheme. so yea some words came out twice and shit but thanks for the feed fam.

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3201559
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3201560

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scanz....whatever happen to our collab ?....lol.....nice wordplay by the way....short piece.....nothin else....~1~

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B.E.S.T.....HAHA

i moved thats what happened... lol kinda lost mind but ill get to that when i can. dont have internet in my crib so it make take a minute

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To be honest i diddnt like this shit to much...it seems like you got a good idea of wat type of message you wanna put across but the shit just comes off very Stock/Basic
I mean ur multis could have been a lot better but fuk it keep trying u can only go up from here! 4.5/10...................constant elevation is the key to success!!!

Pretty good, could be better but no complaints

those aint multis, and theres to much repetition, for me its better if you dont use the same word, and im not sure and i cant be fucked looking in a thesaurus or some shit but im pretty sure "intercision" isnt a word, my bad if im wrong, if it is id like to know the context, it looks like you threw this together just on the sound of "sion", for real theres some good multi tutorials out there...check em out "multi syllable rhyming" no hate i aint at the top of my game either, elevation is a life time thing ya feel...peace

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intercision is a word... just not sure if it spelt like that, but ya thanks for the feeds. keep droppin...and its a multi-madness... so they are multies, and if a word was repeated then if has a different message then the first... so ya sorry bout that

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This is the type of peice that should be in cyphers, its a keystyle. Im gonna leave it open cause it was posted before I was modded.
Anymore small, pointless drops like this will be closed and shifted to cyphers.

Intercision is a word. Just wasnt used right in this.