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Old 11-26-07, 03:56 PM   #1
Jay Rose
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just a lil track looking for some feeback

IP: F1C4 E190

a lil track i did bout how i felt when i saw my ex for the first time.....gotta bottle those emotions up till i get em out on a track ya know.....


yea lookin for feedback on what you think of the track and also feedback on mixing n shit....any suggestions n whatnot...


Butterflies -
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/def...&songID=5997047
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
i thought about the army
i dropped out and joined a band instead


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Old 11-26-07, 08:57 PM   #2
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i like the finger picking in the beat, well done

nice presence, i like how you started out, but i think took you too long to establish a flow. The background vocals were really well done. Nice mix, what do you record with (software), what type of mix you use?

confident pauses, vocals a little low, delivery is on par wiht a few slips.

good shit
peace

we should collab sometime. let me know if you got anything in the works.
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Old 11-26-07, 09:55 PM   #3
Jay Rose
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word man thanks...yea i know which words you mean when you said a few slips...just didnt feel like touchin it up.....i still use cool edit, cuz im lazy, and for mixing technique...i just compress my vocals not to harsh n mix it all myself with the lows n mids n what not....but as for a collab...i got an open one up on my page....you can hit it up if you want....

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/def...&songID=5997063

feel free to rip that up n send it back to me....n if you want to you can pm me n what not n i can do the mixing if you just send your raw vocals....just keep in touch with it
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
i thought about the army
i dropped out and joined a band instead


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Old 11-27-07, 11:31 AM   #4
Jay Rose
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i could really use some feed seeing how im gettin ready to record a bunch of tracks i want to know how i should adjust my mixing....and i just want to hear what chall think of the song
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
i thought about the army
i dropped out and joined a band instead


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Old 11-27-07, 05:30 PM   #5
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man i am ffffffeeeeeeeeelin the guitar on this vibe

did you do that shit yourself?

you sound kinda like someone but i can't figure it out lol

im likin this
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Old 11-30-07, 02:05 PM   #6
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anyone else got anything to say?
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
i thought about the army
i dropped out and joined a band instead


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