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03-09-09, 12:12 PM | #1 | ||||
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Week 8: H.T 0-0 .vs N+1 2-0
IP: AA5B 746B
Monday Morning: Battles are set up Wednesday: H.T 1 bar Thursday: N1 2 bars Friday: H.T 1 bar Sunday: Battles Night Close Feeding is allowed and will be optional
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03-09-09, 02:52 PM | #2 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 349B 5192
everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it
i could just waste money? but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket (n1= a Russian rocket that was never launched) |
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03-10-09, 03:24 PM | #3 | |||||
Maggot
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IP: 1356 B750
check...HA HAHA
Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand.... I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land.. Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny? I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny... ....(THE GREATEST) (Muhammad Ali knocked out Sonny Liston, First round, first minute...any boxing fan will know that though)
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03-10-09, 05:23 PM | #4 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 349B 5192
saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch'
oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat (a gat is a female goat plus a gun think about it its pretty simple ) |
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03-10-09, 06:01 PM | #5 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: A1E4 9BCF
H.T - Your first punch would be a decent nameplay... if he was N1.. its NTT, I believe.
So, that one doesn't hit hard. NTT- Your first punch could've been doper with better wording... u should've encorporated the word punches in there somewhere would've connected it all better. Your second punch wasn't much of a punch, you just made a statement about that fight and explained what it meant, nahmean? HT - Your second punch i wasn't feeling. Again, don't explain your punches.. please. Vote - NTT for his first punch, barely, even though the wording was iffy. |
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03-10-09, 06:28 PM | #6 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 349B 5192
alright thanks for the vote man but in the set up an everything by civil it says n1 not nt i had no idea but its all good
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03-10-09, 10:47 PM | #7 | |||||
Maggot
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IP: 1356 B750
uppin..
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Although these words, DIG, DEEP
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03-11-09, 12:55 AM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: A0BC FE33
both 1 bars are the hardest outta the 2 you guys got...
H.T nice flow and hit i understood ur punch better after i read the brake down of it nice... N.T you had a nice flip on hes punch but felt like it wasnt a hard blow thou just a simple diss to me no hate... vote: H.T ( for more original and creative punch rather then a basic feed ) |
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03-11-09, 10:13 AM | #9 | |||||||
Addicted
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IP: B158 C755
Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand....
I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land.. I actually really liked this, needs to be reworded but I think the concept could have been dope Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny? I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny... this was weak everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it i could just waste money? but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket concept was ok but your wording and structure is not saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch' oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat Iv'e thought a female goat was a nanny? and punch is weak vote NT
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03-11-09, 02:33 PM | #10 | ||||
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IP: AA5B 746B
HT....what happened man? i definately must have been confused as to who you are on rb. I apparantly have you confused with someone else, cuz he doesnt write like that. Anyways this is the deal. BOTH of you are having the exact same problem.
First and for most, your structure. You guys have to work on that rhyme scheme and incorporating the right ammount of words in your bars. Shorten them up, dont try n saay so much. in a single punch, theres no point in tryin to say 3 or 4 different things. A punch should basically have 1 concept, set it up in your 1st bar..then hit it hard with a good finish in ya 2nd bar. Another thing, is the statements...the fact that you guys are trying to say sooo much in your bars. It comes off as a statement, you cant make a good punch with that many things being said. Go one direction with it, it will come off more effectively. ill come back shortly and breakdown your bars, and try n explain what im saying v/ N
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03-12-09, 01:54 PM | #11 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: D424 C1A5
everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it
i could just waste money? but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket the flow of this is way off and the structure is weak as hell... kinda hurt just reading this... The punch was OKAY if his name was n1 and i can understand your confusing... thats the mods fault. but try to shorten ya bars up you really didnt need all those extra syllables Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand.... I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land.. coo, nice flip... i kinda like it. Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny? I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny... this was played and doesn't really hit hard, i felt you shoulda came harder with this bar saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch' oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat okay even though this is short... this is stretched!! you have so much extra words in here that dont mean shit to the punch, take em out like a target... get short and sweet with your bars man, they easier to read like that... and regardless this punch doesn't hit Okay i think ya'll need to focus on being short and sweet wit ya bars, theres no need for run on sentences. but The only real line i liked in this was NT first bar. soo vote: NtT
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03-13-09, 07:17 PM | #12 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: DF87 550F
everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it
i could just waste money? but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket this was cool, the wording could have been better but it was still good to me saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch' oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat this was lame Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand.... I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land.. this was a good piggyback off his punch...basic, but kinda funny Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny? I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny... this was a descent similie, nothin special, but okay ______________________________- Vote - N+T, both his disses were straight. H.T. only had one good punch.
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03-16-09, 11:08 AM | #13 | ||||
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IP: AA5B 746B
NT wins 3-0
HT loses 0-1
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