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09-04-05, 11:45 AM | #1 | |||
Skadoosh!
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Mizz Fyre vs. Drama Queen
IP: 9DB1 64D6
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Check in by Wednesday Pieces due by Friday Voting closes by Sunday Topic: Last Resort * If you think that one of the pieces in this battle should go into the Pieces of Inspiration thread then please state which piece in your vote. * Last edited by Drama Queen : 09-04-05 at 04:01 PM. |
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09-04-05, 12:09 PM | #2 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: DC9C C8F5
I guess we got our rematch after all huh
Checkity Check G'luck chica
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09-04-05, 03:00 PM | #3 | |||
**the council**
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IP: 95A1 07C4
^^^lol i guess so.....check.........g'luck
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09-08-05, 02:10 PM | #4 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: 9DB1 64D6
Extension granted till Saturday.
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09-09-05, 12:28 PM | #5 | |||
**the council**
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IP: 6E6B 0872
Then Visions of you playing in the sand, running and butterfly catching Now and again you‘d turn to wave, our smiles eventually matching Building castles, while me and your dad were trying to build bridges I was bringing the heat, he was the one keeping his cool like fridges Everything was going great, but we had occasional ups and downs Still we got through them because you were always the family clown Photos capturing memories, that’s all I have to make me remember Moments that disappeared when we faced our worst December…… Christmas The angel looks over your bed, guarding you when I’m not present A torment, can’t be there 24-7, so she’s someone I sometimes resent We decorated the tree for you but the doctors say your sights failing Like a broken boat, you need fixing so for now we have to stop sailing Hooked up to tubes is the only chance you have of seeing tomorrow Words unable to explain my sorrow, its like we have you to borrow Showered with gifts, but the one you need the most, I just can’t give Unable to fill the holes, your slipping through my fingers like a sieve Daddy’s time One night he returned from the hospital, head dripping with sweat Thought he was pretending, but this was the affects of a cigarette I still wondered though, was this man just trying to get my attention Until told it was a heart attack, something he didn’t know, to mention All those years of not needing him, why now did he choose to leave It makes me heave, so wrapped up with you, I was unable to grieve The last resort You’d always wanted to spend your last moments, back on the beach Something you stated all the time, before the monster took your speech We put your body in the wheelchair, no longer able to walk, so fragile A far cry from what you once were, like a gymnast so sleek and agile The nurses left us alone for a minute, you clutched your pink cover Wherever we would go, no escaping, above us death would hover I lifted your blue satin pillow, gently pressed it across your mouth You didn’t even shout, I think you realised from this, there’s no out You were fighting many battles but they would eventually lead to wars This act was my last resort and evidently this whole place was yours
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09-10-05, 11:59 AM | #6 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: BE51 9836
Dear darling, I write you this letter to merely speak the blunt truth Of why I wasted my youth on that one forbidden fruit I pity though not blame you if you fail to grasp this For you've stared helplessly in my eyes of sadness As I tried to hide and disguise what's lying beneath You never knew in his arms I found a place of retreat Too blind to see you and I were just playing our roles But with him … it was a magic connection of souls I will never regret getting too deep into this abyss As soon as I tasted bliss, I knew what I had missed During all those years, I lived with terrifying fears Of you packing your bags and leaving me in tears But who would have thought I’d be the one going? Insults kept flowing; your true nature was showing Pushing me against wall, pulling down my jeans Like amateur porno scenes or some horny teens You fucking bitch, you got nerve cheating on me Well, I hope that you choke in your own debris Do not even touch me ever again or I’ll sue you I’ll fuck you up, make you turn black and blue Guess you won’t be a blood anymore then baby I’m done and will never return: there’s no maybe But eventually I got caught up in these dire straits So I arrived at my last resort: these heaven gates
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09-10-05, 12:23 PM | #7 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: 9DB1 64D6
decent pieces from both
both stayed consistent to the topic all the way through, both had a good flow and you both came with good approaches to the topic. the imagery in both pieces was good, you both had emotion in your piece and they gave nice pictures to the reader of the topic. i was feelin mizz fyre's piece more and i felt that she had more thought and feeling in her verse, she was a little more consistent in everything over DQ's piece, cud be down to she put down a longer piece and was still consistent, but i feel that DQ didnt really put a lot of effort into this piece and it just seems a little flat in places so my vote goes to...................MIZZ FYRE |
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09-10-05, 12:35 PM | #8 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 28AD 5545
This was an interesting batttle,Both Stayed on topic through out eachothers verse.....both had good structure which gave it good flow i felt the imagery in mizz fyres was more vivid than Drama queens both had good emotion but as king said, mizz fyre was more consistant wit her creativness etc. than drama queen Dq ive seen better than this.....so my vote has to go to Mizz Fyre
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09-12-05, 12:29 AM | #9 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: 9DB1 64D6
Mizz Fyre Wins 2-0.
This Battle Is Now Closed. |
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