This is How my Girlfriend's Friend Got Pregnant

Wrench my body heat is like hot chocolate and like
The stock market it rise and fall when my thighs all open the hype
Is real with boys, don.t deal in toys for sex and my body ripe
Like yellow peaches, boys say my juicy coo-chee is absolute
Like fruit loops in a bowl I’m just milk in silk and cute
Wan na be a lady in marriage before pushing a baby carriage
Crazy savage will get me pregnant and leave me a average
Single mother then girls will talk behind my bac call me
Blind and whack for having sex and not grabbing a free
Kotex from my purse boo, so Wrench one of my friends
Got pregnant in December right? She remember the night
He was jest going crazy and the juice was flowing like
Gravy knowing a baby was cumming in nine months
Oh jest wet the sheets just skeet skeet juice the bed jumps
It started when he rubbed her feet on the love seat
Thug beat on the CD shook her candies like club heat
Took off her panties went down town to hound around
Licked her thighs stuck his tongue quick in her pies so renowned
Oh she just screamed and creamed fondle her own breast
Was wearing a long dress it was a strong test at home blessed
Now naked she couldn’t fake it his tongue was so deep

structure is a mess.
you force your multis.
and yeh, its wack.

rofl...holy shit this was funny but stupid n wack

Lets Get Something Straight Whack Means Unusual And To You Two Suppose To Be Smart Cats Whom Know Nothing About Reality (what Is Whack About A Girl Getting Pregnant? Ha! Ha! Ha1 Lets Be Real) But Thanks For Responding To This Doe

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This Shit Wasnt That Bad, Fuck What Them Dudes Was Sayin... It Seems Like You Got A Fast Flow That Dont Pause Alot, I Was Readin It Without A Pause After Every Line And It Seemed Like It Flowed Fine, The Way It Was Typed Up Just May Confuse Some Amatures. And I Didnt Know If This Was Suppost To Depict The Pain And Struggle A Pregnant Teen Goes Through Or If It Was Just A Muhfucken Penthouse Letter About A Slut. But It Was Straight Keep Doin Ya Thing.

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XpLiCiT187 tank for the honesty for real appreciate that and the props

During sex I’m protected by a rubber, got rejected by my lover
Now can’t git none end up a legit bum begging for some, discovered
My motive was to kiss her lips while she twist her hips //
In class listening was a swell tool some got expelled from school
For fighting after some bazaar writing became and infidel or fool
Fake domes can’t stem or perk I shaped and trim homework
With an ax, my brain hangs loosely like an empty bag strong jerk
Simply hag doing the wrong work, now my dumb butt on streets
Need come up and speak to cats about life, bow my head and weeps
Use the juice from college to try and produce knowledge put an end
To loose garbage, this is all flames but like ball games it can be postponed
So I must host strong lyrics and battle strong spirits try roast homes
With the heat of love tired of being a deadbeat thug traveling alone

Lmfao......i remember you...haha you still suck duke

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OYD MAFIA

This wasn't great there were amusing parts in it that kept my attention for a while but as an overall piece it lacks in imagery sicamore multies and basically is at a novie stage, try delving into more complex topics and somehitng that hasn't been done before or flip a topic and write it...W/e though, Stay up

Pakaveli there you go again just name anyone off or on the net who has flipped that topic look kid your problem is you try and look down when the fucking truth is before your face
but i do appreciate you responding and this is complex just let me see you write in this format

I never look dpown on anyones work na mean..i want you to drop something that will make me go Damn na eman...G/L for your writing and flow eazy i'm not a beef taker or giver ...Stay up

well m'aam

it is certainly surprising that a woman's perspective can be applied to this subject.

i liked it.

you had tasteful imagery, you brought me to the scene, as in, i could see a video in my head for this.

whenever you bring that out in a reader, you are doing something positive.

i don't agree that the multis were forced, i believe that your concept of this idea is a little basic. maybe if you worked on that, these people wouldn't be such hypocrits.

like i said, you spent time on this and it makes a good point. i suggest you write 2 more verses and post these. i would like to see improvement in multis but a whole song.

good job

keep posting and forget what these people say, i enjoyed it.

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