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Old 04-01-07, 05:02 PM   #1
$DoughBoy-T$
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yo when medi spits a track the girls go wild
i lik em an afreak em like a black n mild
i'm an esquire dude i got a knakk for style
keep shorties chasing me like i snatched they child
i got dollar bills so they dancing now
and fuck a number kid i'll just jot down her address
i ain't looking for love, i'm trying to fuck in her mattress
ugly as fuck, but still i fuck, its madness
it's better than sex when i spit this rap shit
i'm tarzan on a track because my spit be savage
i'm the king of this jungle, my queen looks better than average
i grow more green than letuce and cabbage
i tote so much green i travel with baggage
i make so much green i let the poor people have it
i'm amplified so when you hear my voice put your speakers on blast
i put fuel in your tank because what i spit be that gas
yea i'm a real gangster , i'll kill you in broad day light
might spare your life, thats only if your broad lay right

ya'll bitches is actors , ya'll live under the stage light
ya'll cakes ass niggaz, ya'll patrol the block with a cake knife
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Old 04-02-07, 01:37 PM   #2
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You Obviously Have An Idea What Ur Doin, But It Was Kinda Simple, Make Ur Metaz More Complex And Try An Be More Original, The Flow Was Good, Practice Makes Perfect But Wat Ur Doin There Would Come Off Better In Audio
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Old 04-02-07, 09:09 PM   #3
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Ya got a good base..now you just need to elevate from it. Be a little more original, flow was decent..maybe a little more wordplay and vocab, other than that nothin wrong with it. I'll keep an I out for more of your posts.
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