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07-03-04, 12:49 AM | #1 | |||||||
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"3"months
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Its been 3 months since we were together, 3 months since I cried, 3 months since i layed in my bed and thought of you
No wait thats a lie, Its been 3 months since I couldn't stop thinking of you, who would think it would be 3 months since i gave myself 2 you, hmm... 3 the amount of times i saw you or more, 3 tha hours we talked on tha phone for just a day 3 the qauntity of words you said to me to show what you felt, 3 thoughts of mines to one of yours, 3 steps is wat it took for us to get thru the door, 3 times it took for us to intertwine, Afterwards 3 words Then from then on the world turned 3 fast turns and has left me burned, now all to say its been 3 months since we last spoke or joked and seen each other 3 things into one mistake has left my mind wonder 3 times tha norm, to see wat I did wrong, Now i'm here 3 months later writinga poem about You & me trying to seek who? ME
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07-03-04, 01:55 AM | #2 | |||||
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nice poem girly, i liked how u played off tha #3, it was real imaginative,had a lot of emotion, made me think about the "one" that got away, you're a good writer, keep doin yo thang.....its good seein more girls postin they shit, keep it up
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07-16-04, 02:35 AM | #3 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: EC0B 84C7
cool poem
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07-16-04, 02:53 AM | #4 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 7C6F 690C
nice poem...felt dat...n like fluid said makes u think bout da one dat got away...had alot of emotion...keep comin wit em...peace
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07-18-04, 10:53 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 2195 8BED
nice poem dat shit was stright
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07-19-04, 07:58 AM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 06D4 9403
It was pretty nice. The structure was messy though, and punctuation was missing in some places which both made it hard to read and look a little bad. Besides that, i would have to say it was a pretty nice poem. 5.5/10
Return the favor please. Stranger at the Gates
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