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10-03-04, 09:23 PM | #1 | |||||
GoD LiKe
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"Death of the Sun: When Nature Strikes"
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-DEATH OF THE SUN-
The tear spot, my throat throbs Life coats lies with low tides. Stranded on the sandy beach with no ties... Thrown by. The chrome lights in memory Flown by like a fairy but visually scary Timidly staring, trilogy daring limitlessly Lost my bearing and the history of certain things. This dragon lost its wings When it seperated from its family. Capturing the picture graph of nature, Stabbing leaves of poison ivy drops Secrets locked, perhaps philosophy knocks It's gotta be the prophecy I think But it's not... Just the past that's haunting me, I thought I forgot. The death of a sun, throbs the chest cavity Above and beyond the battle beats My tissues dampened, Silence seeps.....devours Reap the problems as a coward losing sleep. Metacarpals fuel the key to type a seed It's grown to breed this rap-like poem-like rap To energize Hell from me. Like jail I be but the cell has thickened walls; Ghastly oceans overlooked My hidden flaws now opened up like malls Then close upon a deception took. The Devil's prolific weapon is manhood To test the fortress of faith with openness Before it's understood and focused in. My heart has died to be broken in. ..................... And in the end it's been persistence. Sealed in a closed coffin and still breathin'. After the real beatings of punishment troubled, I rumbled thunderstorms within a closed circle. Feeling the feelings of emotion, I kicked the turbulence of stress. The solar kills the skin But still I'm protected within my polar self. A child and soon to be parent Are the only two things you need to conjure Hell; Contagious, spreading deadly fires On the property of farmer's fields. Offerings tarnish wealth. The heart was closed, Mind, body, and soul in jail. Death of the "sun" (son); Where the dragon is slayed But his life has just begun.
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10-06-04, 06:13 PM | #2 | |||||
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uppn\ atleast tell me this sucked
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10-24-04, 12:58 PM | #3 | |||||
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10-24-04, 01:27 PM | #4 | |||
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yo I liked this this was real coo fam......I liked to read stuff like this......
good vocab and imagery dog nice shit..... |
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11-09-04, 12:03 PM | #5 | |||||
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This flowed very well, and i liked the title and how you incorporated this in your piece,as different meanings, the sun(son), beautifully written, and it rhymed well too, i dont think anyone touches your vocab....1
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