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03-21-03, 02:26 AM | #1 | ||||||
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"Count The Tears" LV & AMOR
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AMOR = blue
LV = red Count the tears I've cried Each time I wished to be by your side Eyes opened wide yet to my love you were blind Even as I said and showed it, you couldn't see the signs Count the tears I've cried My heart was hardened beyond recognition And there's so many that beg to be in your position I got so much love to give and you won't even accept it It's like you can't even detect it, much less respect it I'd give you all I could, entirely “me” Heart and soul, even my body You gave the illusion and even "said" you loved me too But now you act like you don't, can't help but wonder if it was ever true Count the tears I've cried Each time I wished to be by your side Eyes opened wide yet to my love you were blind Even as I said and showed it, you couldn't see the signs Count the tears I've cried A title means nothing to me, you'll "always" be my Queen Can't deny that you're love is all I need Never shed tears cuz no others were worthy Yet the reason I cry is cuz you hurt me Pains in my heart, like waters run deep Thoughts of you run through my head, awake or asleep Plans for "our" future and talks about us together, Float from your thoughts like light winds under a feather Yet my dreams remain in limbo cuz for "us" there'll be no forever Count the tears I've cried Each time I wished to be by your side Eyes opened wide yet to my love you were blind Even as I said and showed it, you couldn't see the signs Count the tears I've cried your love is unbearable, the thought of you not in my life is like, death from hands of cannibals . . I hope you don’t ever leave, cause if you do its like cutting my heart out, and leaving it there to bleed . . your kisses planted the seed, you not caring about the way I love you, turns my passion to weeds . . I cant give you my all, cause the love I attempt to give, you hide bob and weave . . I smile why, the love you pretend to give I take it half heartedly . . Count the tears I've cried Each time I wished to be by your side Eyes opened wide yet to my love you were blind Even as I said and showed it, you couldn't see the signs Count the tears I've cried I bury the pain inside of me, I cant stand to see you not knowing I exist, I play the role of loved, but really my heart fills dissed . . the touch from your warmth, turns my warm body to a cold winters mist . . you say you love me, but why, when the words to me sound like your fist . . I know you not real, nor love in your minds feature will ever exist . . you say we can get together later, when, when I’m died off earth, and worms are eating my optics . . or when I hand my self cause you left, in the box called my closet . . |
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03-21-03, 12:08 PM | #2 | |||||||
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DAMN...that shit was deep and got me thinkin... i like that in poetry..not weak it was beautiful nahmean...i really liked this one...y'all got some talent right there...one
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03-21-03, 08:03 PM | #3 | ||||||
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I guess this was nicely done...
..i mean it's a subject that some would say is cliche...but it had a smooth and, well, nice flow and feel to it... ..no real critique to offer, i'm sure someone else can give you that...but some pieces i just don't feel criticising (for reasons of my own that are either very complex, or very simple, all part of being my esoteric and unusual self...i.e. i'm sure you don't give a fuck!).... .....solid collab, respect.... |
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03-22-03, 02:39 AM | #4 | ||||||
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^^ haha...thanx 4 da relpiez so far...check out my other one father down on tha page here, it has NO repliez yet...love...
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03-24-03, 12:07 AM | #5 | ||||||
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that was breath taking.. sad but breath taking..
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