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10-15-05, 03:26 AM
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New to RV
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Sin`cere vs Konchance
IP: 9DB1 64D6
Battle Rules:
20-30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting TOPIC: Open Field "Participants can't be disqualified for having more than 5 open battles" The Establishment vs. Trigga Town Inc. G'Luck Muthafuckaz  Minimum posts to vote: 300 Check in by: 10-18-05 at 03:26 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. Expired battle close - win |
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10-15-05, 07:30 AM
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her one-man army
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IP: EE58 AEAE
Open Field huh.......... iz this gonna be more like poetry, or do want me to write a verse with this as the main theme?
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"i'm not deep, you're shallow..... rid of your women, money, power, greed, pride....... only then will you be truly free. i'm not asking you to walk on water....... just float with me." -Konchance
".........you thinking i'm poor because i don't have any money, now that's rich."-Konchance
I AM RV POETRY!
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10-15-05, 11:18 AM
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#3
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IP: 2102 894E
Sin`cere has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-05 11:18 AM.
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10-15-05, 11:18 AM
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The Truest TRUTH
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IP: 2102 894E
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does it say a poetry batle NO!!!!!!....its topical so checkin so i can get this over wit....lmfao....
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10-15-05, 04:03 PM
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her one-man army
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IP: EE58 AEAE
fuck it............... i got this shit............
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"i'm not deep, you're shallow..... rid of your women, money, power, greed, pride....... only then will you be truly free. i'm not asking you to walk on water....... just float with me." -Konchance
".........you thinking i'm poor because i don't have any money, now that's rich."-Konchance
I AM RV POETRY!
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10-15-05, 04:04 PM
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IP: EE58 AEAE
Konchance has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-05 04:04 PM.
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10-16-05, 12:38 PM
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The Truest TRUTH
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IP: 2102 894E
Through the thickness of the forest of the red grim Darkness prevails when everything is packed in sin This dims the light of the sun that just began to rise Till it dawns, I suffer the fullness of the belly in disguise That tries to hide inside the crowded place that displayed For today I can’t breathe, cuz it’s swarming for everything I say To find, I just want to barely see some of the light tonight But it’s early, so every time I look its blurry of the sunlight In fright, I think if I could ever be alone with my thoughts That it cost me an ample of meditation that I had bought For it got lost, or it was stolen through the crammed meadow So I let go all the anger and try to cut off the heaving fellow My mind is mellowed so I say “Hello” to myself? I’m losing health Invincible I see myself in stealth jus to see myself looking for wealth So I quickly cut the trees, and the canopy fall down.......TIMBER!!! There wasn’t no simpler plan cuz it was easy for the forest to limber Break down in chaos, and there of to escape madness I succeeded Even though I was happy for some reason my heart started bleeding Reading a horror book, I saw what I just did and the emptiness To cut my freedom I also threw away everything in flesh, to rest The birds don’t chirp, the cars don’t move, just total devastation Everything is silent, quiet, muted to the movie of an alien invasion To see that in my eyes I despised myself, in being the bad guy So much blood I see that I bleed in my eyes that I can’t even cry Tears in fear that what I wanted to scream of the pain... I yield That I destroyed everything to think by myself... in the Open Field
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10-17-05, 06:48 PM
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her one-man army
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IP: 21E2 EA6B
this wide spread of brain waves thru my head or mentals
got playaz gettin murked over instrumentals, this just the intro, these hataz still waitin on the punch but they can feel it they gut, i'm talkin losin they lunch, that when i cum hot, and they, well, not, they might actually have to offer up a playa some props, talk like a boss, when the only friends u got in here, and they'll talk shit too when they see u lose, they ain't Sin`cere, but i am and i'ma tell u the truth, u can have 3 days, 4 ghostwriters workin hard in the booth, but in the end your punches don't come thru the tooth, what u want, i got that heat, this fire i'm spittin penetratin your fronts, this iz that open field, back of the school where no one gets caught, the frontlines, so many rhymes, so many battles iz fought, i said open field bcuz ain't nuthin in here iz a secret, Q out the closet, why u ain't follow his example and keep it out front so i wouldn't be forced to help, and wipe that smile off your face i wasn't talkin about u touchin yourself, i'm a newb on this shit bout to show u somethin new, your name, cuz u'll have to change it when u start back in New Crews, think u could possibly be gettin me gotta be kiddin me, u ain't even my enemy, if this for keeps guess u'll be missin your dignity............
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"i'm not deep, you're shallow..... rid of your women, money, power, greed, pride....... only then will you be truly free. i'm not asking you to walk on water....... just float with me." -Konchance
".........you thinking i'm poor because i don't have any money, now that's rich."-Konchance
I AM RV POETRY!
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10-17-05, 06:59 PM
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#9
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IP: 6EB9 28C9
Voted For: Sin`cere
Konchance Your rhyme scheme is very basic throughout this whole thing. It's just one word rhyming (e.g. punch/lunch, crew/you). It just didn't flow that well. It's like, throughout this whole thing you were dissing Sin`cere which isn't necessarily the point of a topical. You had no imagery, because you more concentrating on making fun of him.. and the type of emotion that people like to read in a topical wasn't there. Overall, your verse just wasn't that good for a topical. Your storyline was weak and uncreatives, your rhyme scheme was boring, and there was no imagery or emotion to go along with it. Sin`cere Your rhyme scheme is also basic (e.g. guy/cry, timber/limber), however it's almost like that worked for your story. Your storyline was pretty good.. pretty predictable, but you made it work for the most part. You had some imagery.. pretty good emotion.. just a pretty decent topical all together. Overall Konchance's verse wasn't that good at all to me. He focused more on dissing Sin`cere then putting together a good storyline. There was no imagery or emotion. Sin`cere on the other hand, put together a decent story line along with average imagery and some emotion. In conclusion, Sin`cere just had the better overall verse. Vote - Sin`cere Both of you should sign up for the Punchline League.. you'll elevate pretty fast there. It's a good opportunity for you to battle without messing up your record. |
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10-18-05, 05:25 AM
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her one-man army
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IP: 21E2 EA6B
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good lookin on the honest vote........ i asked if it was going to be MORE like a poetry battle, bcuz i usually do poetry or text..... when he said no, i thought it was just gonna be a battle with open field as the main theme.......
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"i'm not deep, you're shallow..... rid of your women, money, power, greed, pride....... only then will you be truly free. i'm not asking you to walk on water....... just float with me." -Konchance
".........you thinking i'm poor because i don't have any money, now that's rich."-Konchance
I AM RV POETRY!
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10-18-05, 05:41 AM
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Skadoosh!
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This was feedback posted for Sin`cere
IP: 9DB1 64D6
checkin pollz.........................sin`cere got this though
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10-20-05, 02:32 AM
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This was feedback posted for Sin`cere
IP: F019 583F
Checkin' The Polls.
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10-20-05, 02:35 AM
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IP: 6EB9 28C9
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Yeah, I got you. I was just voting on the fact that in the rules it said it was a topical battle. You know how it is.. |
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10-20-05, 06:56 AM
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I see dumb people
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This was feedback posted for Sin`cere
IP: 5B7D 07F3
you best be winning slut face.........................
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10-20-05, 06:19 PM
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This is my first post!
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This was feedback posted for Konchance
IP: 3240 794D
checkin this shit Out ..................................................
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