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20 Lines.

No Recycling.
No Biting.
No Feeding.

Good Luck..

Come Dope.

In.

King Solo can't vote due to him pulling massive bitch moves.

Check..........

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Werd......lets go

Dude...i aint get all the hype..to me ur jus another john doe
I made him look so bad at the sweet 16...mtv had to cancelled the show
My Punchs need sparkin....i'm usin ur head as the flare
B my punchs'll Send u so far diaw south...The Suns'll charge him air fare*
Dude this is my house...when we spit in the Booth
The only reason i didnt Knock u through the Ceilin's...
............cuz i dont feel like fixin the roof
Ur houston jerzy is matchin the heater...when i put the rocket to ur chest
T's mac made mim do such a wind mill..
..............the nba put him in the slam duck contest
son dont hate...cuz ya sis wanna play doctor wit me
I only charged yah family a checkup....cuz i felt she was a flat fee
Damn the Secrets out....but the rest might cause doom
Yea i Always Kiss up to mim's...
........Sister when were alone in Her room
Son I stay wit the flashy ho's...while u stay flashin men
if he got shit up his sleeve,hes been finger fuckin his ass again
so ur predicted to win, but he prolly think i wont bother
knowin u wont come thru for the kids, like a bad father
i'm wrapin his verse...cuz thats wat i do on a battle site
I said lets get it crackin....an he proceded to light up his pipe
Stfu can get it too....yah bodys iced...an i'm meltin d's tricks
I put his grill in the wall so many times....nelly'll ask him to do a remix

*boris diaw on the suns

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We planned to post Tuesday.. but I thought I'd let you test first
While I decided to prewrite..
..so I wouldn't see my lines in your next verse
I know my left hurts.. I'm shutting you up, sick of you talking, son
I won't tell you this one story.. I'll just push you headfirst off of one
And I saw the predictions.. saw some doubt about me ripping this kid
It laid out as a close, line.. but that's just what I'm hitting you with
I'm dominating.. with all the bullshit he states he'll be tried for treason
I need a place to post my verses.. you need to provide a reason
But yo, I pound keys.. sending cats in a spot between life and death
Ray pounds keys because he's blind as hell and has to bite instead
Our rankings tell the story.. your punches were pourin, but killed
Cause I can drop this quarter.. just by using a quarter of my skill
And SunU invited you to E Style.. but now we see Will's fucked
Cause loyalty to the squad doesn't mean SHIT when you still suck
Now I'm just wasting my time.. I've been knowing you're burned a bit
But damn, I KO, RV.. while you just say goodbye to the touranment
I'm ranked as one of the best.. while nothing that you say is art
I'm beating this fag, TM.. while all he wants to do is trade marks



And what the fuck was that.. I know I just finished tearin ya raps
Chances are so stretched.. even your lines got prepared for the match

word to my e-style nuccas. let me break this shiznit down like sausages nah mean?

Trey:
Dude...i aint get all the hype..to me ur jus another john doe
I made him look so bad at the sweet 16...mtv had to cancelled the show
ehh... shit's coo... 5/10
My Punchs need sparkin....i'm usin ur head as the flare
B my punchs'll Send u so far diaw south...The Suns'll charge him air fare*
nice try @ wordplay.... it's coo..... 6/10
Dude this is my house...when we spit in the Booth
The only reason i didnt Knock u through the Ceilin's...
............cuz i dont feel like fixin the roof
lol haha pretty nice.... 6/10
Ur houston jerzy is matchin the heater...when i put the rocket to ur chest
T's mac made mim do such a wind mill..
..............the nba put him in the slam duck contest
damn, nice wordplay.... good.... 7/10
son dont hate...cuz ya sis wanna play doctor wit me
I only charged yah family a checkup....cuz i felt she was a flat fee
it's decent...... 5/10
Damn the Secrets out....but the rest might cause doom
Yea i Always Kiss up to mim's...
........Sister when were alone in Her room
haha nice.... not really diss to him tho, but funny 6/10
Son I stay wit the flashy ho's...while u stay flashin men
if he got shit up his sleeve,hes been finger fuckin his ass again
lmao haha, that made me laugh... good..... 8/10
so ur predicted to win, but he prolly think i wont bother
knowin u wont come thru for the kids, like a bad father
ehh..... to basic.... 4/10
i'm wrapin his verse...cuz thats wat i do on a battle site
I said lets get it crackin....an he proceded to light up his pipe
it's ok....... 4/10
Stfu can get it too....yah bodys iced...an i'm meltin d's tricks
I put his grill in the wall so many times....nelly'll ask him to do a remix
it's coo....... 5/10

OVerall, you started decent in beginning, then got dope near middle, and fell off a lil near end. overall pretty nice verse good shit. 56/100 56%

Aiight mimesis:
We planned to post Tuesday.. but I thought I'd let you test first
While I decided to prewrite..
..so I wouldn't see my lines in your next verse
it's ok.... 4/10
I know my left hurts.. I'm shutting you up, sick of you talking, son
I won't tell you this one story.. I'll just push you headfirst off of one
lmao haha....... good... 9/10
And I saw the predictions.. saw some doubt about me ripping this kid
It laid out as a close, line.. but that's just what I'm hitting you with
good wordplay... 5/10
I'm dominating.. with all the bullshit he states he'll be tried for treason
I need a place to post my verses.. you need to provide a reason
ehh.... not feeling it too much.. 4/10
But yo, I pound keys.. sending cats in a spot between life and death
Ray pounds keys because he's blind as hell and has to bite instead
it's ok, got personal there.... 5/10
Our rankings tell the story.. your punches were pourin, but killed
Cause I can drop this quarter.. just by using a quarter of my skill
haha, nice wordplay..... 7/10
And SunU invited you to E Style.. but now we see Will's fucked
Cause loyalty to the squad doesn't mean SHIT when you still suck
ehh...... 4/10
Now I'm just wasting my time.. I've been knowing you're burned a bit
But damn, I KO, RV.. while you just say goodbye to the touranment
it's ok.... 4/10
I'm ranked as one of the best.. while nothing that you say is art
I'm beating this fag, TM.. while all he wants to do is trade marks
haha nice..... 6/10
And what the fuck was that.. I know I just finished tearin ya raps
Chances are so stretched.. even your lines got prepared for the match
lmao shit had me rollin' dope. 9/10

overall, you didn't come as hard as i thought you would. Really unconsistent. like you had some dope lines, but then you had some wackish ones later on, but overall, pretty nice verse. not your best. 57/100 57 %

Overall, mimesis edged this one out. shit was really close. That closer saved you imo, mim. But overall good job to both.....

v/Mimesis

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your wordplay isnt' bad just doesnt come hard enough. The bolded line was your best



Those ^bolded lines were nice. More consisten & although it wasn't a ripping like I've seen you do before it did the job.

V/ Mimesis. Good battle.

Dude...i aint get all the hype..to me ur jus another john doe
I made him look so bad at the sweet 16...mtv had to cancelled the show
ok, but the concept of using an MTV show or some kind of reality show to make a punch has been overdone now..
My Punchs need sparkin....i'm usin ur head as the flare
B my punchs'll Send u so far diaw south...The Suns'll charge him air fare*
this was ok, the wordplay was barely acceptable though..
Dude this is my house...when we spit in the Booth
The only reason i didnt Knock u through the Ceilin's...
............cuz i dont feel like fixin the roof
i like these types of punches, this cud've been executed better though..
Ur houston jerzy is matchin the heater...when i put the rocket to ur chest
T's mac made mim do such a wind mill..
..............the nba put him in the slam duck contest
NICE!! this had good wordplay in..
son dont hate...cuz ya sis wanna play doctor wit me
I only charged yah family a checkup....cuz i felt she was a flat fee
punches using mim's sister are getting played..
Damn the Secrets out....but the rest might cause doom
Yea i Always Kiss up to mim's...
........Sister when were alone in Her room
read previous comment..
Son I stay wit the flashy ho's...while u stay flashin men
if he got shit up his sleeve,hes been finger fuckin his ass again
Lmfao!!! an element of gayness to it, but funny nonetheless..
so ur predicted to win, but he prolly think i wont bother
knowin u wont come thru for the kids, like a bad father
this was weak, and worded terribly in the second line..
i'm wrapin his verse...cuz thats wat i do on a battle site
I said lets get it crackin....an he proceded to light up his pipe
played concept, worded weak to..
Stfu can get it too....yah bodys iced...an i'm meltin d's tricks
I put his grill in the wall so many times....nelly'll ask him to do a remix
this was ok, nothing really special..

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We planned to post Tuesday.. but I thought I'd let you test first
While I decided to prewrite..
..so I wouldn't see my lines in your next verse
kinda weak opener, not your best..
I know my left hurts.. I'm shutting you up, sick of you talking, son
I won't tell you this one story.. I'll just push you headfirst off of one
trey had one of these types of punches, this one was dope as fuck and worded a whole lot better..
And I saw the predictions.. saw some doubt about me ripping this kid
It laid out as a close, line.. but that's just what I'm hitting you with
decent flip into a punch, "close line/clothesline" wordplay was ok..
I'm dominating.. with all the bullshit he states he'll be tried for treason
I need a place to post my verses.. you need to provide a reason
a little funny, but again not your best..
But yo, I pound keys.. sending cats in a spot between life and death
Ray pounds keys because he's blind as hell and has to bite instead
Lol, the whole Ray poundin' keys shit has been used before, this was a decent flip though..
Our rankings tell the story.. your punches were pourin, but killed
Cause I can drop this quarter.. just by using a quarter of my skill
this was pretty average..
And SunU invited you to E Style.. but now we see Will's fucked
Cause loyalty to the squad doesn't mean SHIT when you still suck
lol, simplistic diss....nothing creative but still effective..
Now I'm just wasting my time.. I've been knowing you're burned a bit
But damn, I KO, RV.. while you just say goodbye to the touranment
Lol, this was cool...and quite a fresh way of using the tournament name for a punch..
I'm ranked as one of the best.. while nothing that you say is art
I'm beating this fag, TM.. while all he wants to do is trade marks
decent enough nameplay..
And what the fuck was that.. I know I just finished tearin ya raps
Chances are so stretched.. even your lines got prepared for the match
Lmao!!! dope personal...good way to finish..


FINAL VERDICT
Ok, bare in mind this is feedback and not a vote because Mimesis and I seem to have some difference of opinions lately. But, this battle was decent enough that I decided to leave my two cents on it. It was close, closer than it should've been really and that is purely down to the fact that Mimesis didn't put his best efforts into this. Trey didn't either, but to be honest and most will agree that if Mimesis came full force he would've dominated this battle. Both had rather inconsistent verses, both had some average punches and a few weak ones, and both had a couple of dope punches that just made me think "DAMN!!" and laugh my ass off. Trey came stronge with the wordplay as he generally does, but some of his lines were stretched. That may be something you want to work on. Mimesis though, had them simplistic punches where he flips something so basic into a punch that makes you crack up. Examples would be the close line/clothesline punch and the one story punch, both those were nice. Also, his closer was probably the best punch of the battle. Trey's finger fuckin his ass punch was dope, and the NBA line was cool but other than that he really didn't have much that stood out. Overall I think Mimesis edged it with a bit more consistency and a few stronger punches than Trey. But still, it was a good battle nonetheless.

So, if I could vote I would go with Mimesis......and not just because he said I can't vote either and this is some way of sucking up, lol. He edged this battle, Trey you're still getting better, just try and not stretch your lines so much.

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Dude this is my house...when we spit in the Booth
The only reason i didnt Knock u through the Ceilin's...
............cuz i dont feel like fixin the roof
Son I stay wit the flashy ho's...while u stay flashin men
if he got shit up his sleeve,hes been finger fuckin his ass again

vs.

We planned to post Tuesday.. but I thought I'd let you test first
While I decided to prewrite..
..so I wouldn't see my lines in your next verse
Now I'm just wasting my time.. I've been knowing you're burned a bit
But damn, I KO, RV.. while you just say goodbye to the touranment
And what the fuck was that.. I know I just finished tearin ya raps
Chances are so stretched.. even your lines got prepared for the match

I like the one story line but felt is worded kinda off, like how you just randomly said you'd tell a story, other then that, this was a good battle, I judged kinda hard here, but uh, I got mim taking this by 1 quotable, and quotables don't tell the whole, all of Mimesis lines I didn't quote > All of TM's lines I didn't quote.

v/mimesis

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Nice battle, but Trey prolly bit half his lines.

Vote - Mim

Dude this is my house...when we spit in the Booth
The only reason i didnt Knock u through the Ceilin's...
............cuz i dont feel like fixin the roof
Son I stay wit the flashy ho's...while u stay flashin men
if he got shit up his sleeve,hes been finger fuckin his ass again

vs.

We planned to post Tuesday.. but I thought I'd let you test first
While I decided to prewrite..
..so I wouldn't see my lines in your next verse
Now I'm just wasting my time.. I've been knowing you're burned a bit
But damn, I KO, RV.. while you just say goodbye to the touranment
And what the fuck was that.. I know I just finished tearin ya raps
Chances are so stretched.. even your lines got prepared for the match

v/ mimesis
closer then i and probaly he thought it would be though
props trey

Word. On to the next round.

Mimesis wins and advances.

This battle is closed.