Think that you needa get your voice more energetic and put some clownin tones into it, for example as your startin through the middle through in some sarcastic tones which is like makin you voice crack on certain words and put some like smash mouth style into it because every song has a personality your personality was boring no affence but if you change up ur energy level and how you speakin them u can still use ur voice through most, but jus on some part make the personality come out of it, Other than that the lyrics were decent, The wording of the lyrics was good, it started strong and ended weak, U should start it weaker than you finish it, no hate i would judge a 6-10 if you were to make the personality come out and would have finished strong i would say 8-10 so your lyrics were good.

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