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08-20-04, 10:05 PM | #1 | |||
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One Love, One Mistake
IP: 5867 FD83
for drop n bombs
One Love, One Mistake
missy fiya featuring verbal abuse (fiya) [time 9:15pm] as my conscious lies in more guilt than my sin he must leave, it is time for my husband to come in noticin’ he was kinda upset knowin’ I put my ring first kept promisin’ he’d please me ’til the mr. gets off work i was so free and open to him, yea he had good company kissin’, huggin’ me while my keepers makin’ our money b4 it got further, i numbed actions askin’ for him to vanish imaginin’ my husband’s face if he saw what had happened [time 11:32pm] cheatin? didn’t cross my mind verb didn’t come home on time so caught in reactions; he’s never late but love never felt blind passion ruined my thoughts, cost of protectin’ truths’ll pay n full feelin’ like a fool, how can I tell him a lie, like the heat went cool wut next? verb got explainin to do! 2 hours ago he shoulda been here.. don’t know what’s to him, but I have words to confess without fears of his worst comin’ to my worst, I can’t imagine half the outcome... being lonely, empty, too worried verb was makin’ home at another one.. (the ending/ conclusion) [time 12:09am] verb enters the bed room waking me sayin’ he needed to talk to me most shockingly, it was he who actually looked like he was sorry.. i felt relieved knowin’ he was safe, but he caught my eyes in pain asked if I was okay, I said “I love you... I just found out today...” it seems like he understood wut I meant cuz he nodded the same.. “forgive me, I’m sorry” not statin my crime, his followed that name takin’ his shirt off, rubbin my outline sayin’ rest now, talk @ daylight i said “aight baby”, he told me he didn’t want our forever to end that night... (verb) laying by your side last eve, moved me in ways i never thought possible. yuh see its audible....
...my passion for you wasnt strong enough to overcome one obstacle.the tempation n lust of man's eye is too impatient n thus i conceived. previously i beleived...
...this affair was a deed to married couple's free will to cross borders and tease.dont mistake it, i confess with all thats fair n just that my place is uncertain. i hate how its hurtin...
...to you and you only have i sinned against, just to look apon my face is a burden.im just a typical male, with no excuse i understand your darranged n scarred. my pain is starved...
...if i can just fill this blemish with love n comfort, i assure you a change of heart.never again will i sneak, for its only one woman that is fit for my taste. God dip me in grace...
...cause with your forgivness, id do one thing. its to paste my lips to your face.Erm, One Love
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08-22-04, 04:04 AM | #2 | ||||
Still Sick
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IP: FD66 F521
It was a nice callob.
The story was sort of bland. And it was all worded rather poorly. The lyrics werent really interesting, for example. There was no multies, and it only the end of the line rhymed. Thats not good, Verb attempted to have multis, but it just didnt work out, because of 1, he shouldnt have had his verse centered. kids was doing that a year ago. dont do that. and 2, his multis were too simple. It was expected to rhyme, yet, it was also expected to be better. I feel Fiya came better. like I said earlier, nice collab, but, thats the only thing positive abou this peice. I'll give it a 5/10. pZ
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08-22-04, 07:03 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 005F B7E2
this was all right but let me drop these here punchline
Even as a teacher you couldn’t be a creature with knowledge Your feature is garbage so why seek leisure in college? Not clever and firm you’ll never learn to rhyme |
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08-22-04, 02:52 PM | #4 | |||
As Seen On T.V.
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IP: 5867 FD83
thats why your 0-2
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08-22-04, 03:34 PM | #5 | |||||||
~Mr. Punch-Lines~
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IP: 5043 32F4
^lol its wasent that great alright tho youve down a better song but 6/10
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