Listen,
I'm Dyin Inside, Who The Fuck Cares I Feel Like I Been Beaten And Robbed..
But I Still Smile Sometimes Cuz I know You Upstairs Now Eatin Wit God..
I Try To Unwind But Pain Is All This Thug Bares And At Night Sleepin Is Hard..
I Got Ya Tatted On My Arm But That Don't Keep These Tears Off My Cheek..
Not Even This Dough In My Palm Consoles Me, Cuz I Need Ya Here In The Streets..
Who Knows Maybe I'm Selfish Fam But I Can't Control These Emotions I'm Feelin..
I Sit Back And Wonder Where The Help Is Cuz My Heart Broke And Not Healin..
Feel Like Foldin Wit The Hand I Was Dealt Kid Starin Wit No Hope At The Ceilin..
And I Try To Write When Depressed But It's Like I Choke When I Breathe..
Walkin Round Wit A Knife In My Chest But Still Hold Ya Down Bold On My Sleeve..
Moms Tellin Me Have Faith, Grow And Believe, I Just Pray You Doin Good Homie..
Go Cuz You Freed But We Gon Keep Smokin This Weed Cuz The Hood Lonely..


Aight, Leave Ya Thoughts. One.

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nice dowg....

And I Try To Write When Depressed But It's Like I Choke When I Breathe..
Walkin Round Wit A Knife In My Chest But Still Hold Ya Down Bold On My Sleeve..

them my fav lines of tha whole thing...

RIP to ya homie... stay strong playa...

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i just wasnt feelin it..u needed more flow and better rhymes the message it delivered was good but the style u did it in was weak iight elevate...

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Thanx Misfound...

@Insane, I don't mind criticism but you said I need better flow and better rhymes?? Maybe it's you.. Cause when I spit it the flow is crazy. Better rhymes:

I'm Dyin Inside, Who The Fuck Cares I Feel Like I Been Beaten And Robbed..
But I Still Smile Sometimes Cuz I know You Upstairs Now Eatin Wit God..

Moms Tellin Me Have Faith, Grow And Believe, I Just Pray You Doin Good Homie..
Go Cuz You Freed But We Gon Keep Smokin This Weed Cuz The Hood Lonely..

^^Maybe now that you see the rhyme scheme, it'll flow better for ya. Anyway, thanx for the feedback and takin the time to read my shit. One.

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