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Old 01-19-05, 06:16 PM   #1
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I'mma Make Money

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yeah.......
feel dis 1
aint no other way when u broke as fuck ya know?
but it aint no thang
i'mma make mine

stressin and dealin with strain
it's racking my brain i'm stuck in the game
it's simple and plain fuck the fame
i aint no celebrity i'm gettin felonies
ready to die cuz poverty's gettin tha best of me
i got a plan i got a van i got some niggaz 2 ride 4 me man
and i got fam i need grands i'll make some money however i can
robbin and duckin not givin a fuck
cus shit gets thirsty when you in a rut
i'm killin and dealing and makin a livin
niggas is stealin whatever i'm gettin
so i gotta ride and i gotta take
just to provide dawg give me a break
life aint easy and times is hard
i'm tryin 2 stay from behind bars
hustlin strugglin and doin these shows
mackin these broads pimpin these hoes
when niggas act funny tha kid gets gully
some way some how even if i gotta take money
imma make money mayne imma make money

niggas is crusin on fools thats breakin tha rules
because they aint true to payin they dues
this life is so crule everythings fuled
on usin them tools 2 get us some jewels
but i aint no dummy i rip one dunny
when shit gets funny tha kid fakes gully
cuz somehow nigga i gotta make money
even if it seems that i gotta take money
when shit gets funny imma get gully
imma make money mayne imma make money

switchin up flows for tha lame i'm half way insane
slangin this yayo all day yo got my mind stuck on cocaine
what can i do but slang in this dirty game it's so profound
only way to get us out tha hood is sellin these pounds
evading poverty through bank robberies is there another way
at the rate i'm goin i must be the son of God headed for better days
my momma looks so helpless we cant be selfish or we'll lose it
everything the house the car her wedding ring i had to do it
started out sellin on Rimrock moved to Ashcroft in a year
nobody knew what was in my Timb box and i still hide it with fear
what would you do in my situation? so much bullshit i'm facing
still i'm looked down on but my neighbor's a fuckin rapist
see this world's crooked look at the hand i've been dealt and make a move
you'd end up where i am in my shoes slangin dope now wouldn't you?


niggas is crusin on fools thats breakin tha rules
because they aint true to payin they dues
this life is so crule everythings fuled
on usin them tools 2 get us some jewels
but i aint no dummy i rip one dunny
when shit gets funny tha kid fakes gully
cuz somehow nigga i gotta make money
even if it seems that i gotta take money
when shit gets funny imma get gully
imma make money mayne imma make money
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Old 01-19-05, 06:20 PM   #2
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Old 01-19-05, 06:35 PM   #3
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dis was raw...8/10...keep brangin dat heat...
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Old 01-19-05, 06:49 PM   #4
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^^ thanx 4 tha feed mayne.........uppin
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Old 01-19-05, 07:34 PM   #5
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i liked it also gotta give ya a 8/10 you told the story had some flow,rhymes stuck to each other...big ups kid. The structure was alright changed it up alittle but it was koo.if ya want any more feedback just let me know
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Old 01-19-05, 09:56 PM   #6
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Old 01-20-05, 08:29 PM   #7
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Old 01-20-05, 11:02 PM   #8
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shit was real, vocab was a lil simple in some lines but made for a better piece, story stayed apparent through out the whole drop, i enjoyed readin it after i got my magnifying glass out haha.. shit was ill please repay favor "too fresh" on open mic.. peace
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Old 01-21-05, 11:14 PM   #9
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aight mayne i'll have 2 check that out 4 u........uppin
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Old 01-22-05, 10:15 PM   #10
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your first verse was to simple and not reall stuctured good but it flowed well and the rest of your lines were good, good stucture n shit..but for the whole verses all them they were pretty good, good vocabulary and metas seen a few in there good creativty and imagery just a pretty good topic stayed on it well and jsut came out good...try making a chorus in there give it some touch..ight...but yea good verse but try using more vocab to make it define more and use more emotion then you did not to much emotion...pz

check my OM's in the sig...ight try both please thanks..pz
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Old 01-22-05, 11:17 PM   #12
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yo that was really good but the only thing i didn't like was the font it was too small and weird i could bearily make out da words but when i did it was pretty good
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Old 01-22-05, 11:31 PM   #13
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