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Old 02-06-05, 12:07 AM   #1
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Realest words spoken. (Read or miss out on something good)

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Limited Edition decided to be a pussy bitch and no showed on our battle. Drop some words of knowledge to help KO-Cain elevate if you can.

(Feel this spoken acapella)
Power Struggle
...Look...
Growing up as my families back-bone.....At age 13..
I was capped on, by step dads and crack son..
..Infact moms; dont want me around, shes smoked out..
On the town; she was barly around.. By 14..
She got blown down.. & I'm the man a the home now..
...I dont bow, down, see I been living alone pal..
Times is rough enough when your surviving tough yo..
Its live enough, to needa ask for cups of h2o..
You know without welfare? I aint payin the bills..
Money I got? was simply saved for meals..
Each day it kills, me.. Fuck that, its every hour..
Even death could be a happy ending in this struggle for power..

Power..
Power..
Power..
Power..
Power..
I look at TV's in the streets, they show me hope..
Saying they got plans to help homeless, from being broke..
Their fiends though, it seems dope; but they cant understand..
...The governments plans, are all constructed by rich hands..
..& It stands.....Out so bad......They need to listen..
I'd love to see the president placed in my position..
Give him, no house, no food and little hope..
Give him a fucking glock, & laugh when he cant cope..
Give his daughter poor schooling, she must be losing..
Watch her as a young mother, drugs and prostitution..
Then try and confuse him into thinking they got plans..
To help his people on track, saying it aint all bad..
Fuck that.. Fuck patriotism, in a country that tries to fuck me..
You arrogant bitches, acting this vicious can suck me..
...But you love me, as well as my culture your fucking vultures..
Preying on the weak; dont even speak, hear what I told yas..
It aint steriotypical of rappers to bag the government..
Were just facing a struggle fucked up.. & As artists were fucking loving it..


..Try and tell me different..
..Power struggles... 2005!..
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Old 02-06-05, 01:05 AM   #2
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ok, dis was pretty koo mayn

i like ya style and shit, nice
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Old 02-06-05, 01:09 AM   #3
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yo i was definitely feelin this man.....the emotion in it was there and your could feel it........vocab was great.....since u had good vocab....but kept it simple enough to understand easily.......some good multies in there.....overall this was a dope drop and i was really feelin the subject....nice emotion.....keep it up
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Old 02-06-05, 02:38 AM   #4
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Thanks man..
I really would of prefered this to be in the battle..
I hate no shows..
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Old 02-06-05, 09:15 AM   #5
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^^^ i know....

good shit fam word...

but 1 thing...

im the open ic MOD as-well....

and u need 1 link to where u posted proper feed back to like IKE DID QUOTE:
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yo i was definitely feelin this man.....the emotion in it was there and your could feel it........vocab was great.....since u had good vocab....but kept it simple enough to understand easily.......some good multies in there.....overall this was a dope drop and i was really feelin the subject....nice emotion.....keep it up

i concider that a proper feed back, 1 liner feed back wont count, and just give the pros and cons the good and bad stuff about the person drop and try to help them improve word...

so drop some feed back and then copy N paste the link back here word....

CODE STEEL...
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Old 02-06-05, 11:31 AM   #6
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Aiight I'll get to that next time I'm online.. I had a long night man..

Peace......
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Old 02-06-05, 03:18 PM   #7
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ey yo man dis was allrite u had emotion in thurr good vocab, ill give u a 7/10...check out my first drop "im bac bitch" i holla
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Old 02-06-05, 03:42 PM   #8
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chea...i was feelin this 100%...good flow and disses...good shit
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Old 02-06-05, 03:50 PM   #9
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hey thats pretty good i'd give it bout a 7/10 story and all but alot of the words were to simple i mean there's a couple of multi's but u need some more in there but don't get me wrong i was feelin' u all the way
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Old 02-06-05, 11:31 PM   #10
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aight...heres how it all breaks down...

this was a decent verse...your creativity with the topic chosen, and ideas throughout the verse are all really good...but they wern't good enough to carry your verse...your flow could have been better...and some things were irrelevant...not irrelevant..just not important enough to put in your verse...and the things that were in there..it would have made t 10 times more potent if you had maybe rapped about some kind of event that has historical significance to the topic...but all in all..it wasn't bad...on a really positive note...you show an understanding of how this thing is done...which means your going to get really good...but return the favor please....check out..concious meets unconcious...or love letter
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Old 02-07-05, 09:52 AM   #11
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yeh LE is a butt monkey. word dope shit bro.....looks like it was written to a beat. i like your style. keep elevating and u might be as good as me one day.
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