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05-08-07, 08:06 PM
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L.E's Back..."Till Sunrise Platinum Mix"...Will Return the Favor...
IP: 52B3 3524
www.soundclick.com/limitededitioncan
Meh...re-did one of my old songs. Turned out pretty good...I am pretty fucking rusty though. Beat produced by me. Did this a couple of weeks ago. Enjoy, and I will return the favor.  Links: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=242045 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=242109 |
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05-08-07, 09:37 PM
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I'm Talented.Period.
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IP: B4EB 5C31
initially, this was cool...I was feeling the beat with the flow...soundin slick
But, as I had it playing in the background, the track never seemed to switch up...it became monotonous...And, I was wondering where the hook was after a while...ur delivery doesn't change with the hook...and, the beat also stays the same this was nice at the start...then became repetitive Decent track tho bro 1 |
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05-08-07, 09:55 PM
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IP: 52B3 3524
Lol thanks man...as I said, I am rusty as shit. :/
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05-08-07, 10:48 PM
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IP: 3011 7E9C
love the beat...like the one two flow....this is a few syllables from being real good some of the lines make it sound amaturish..examples: instead of sayin party until your brain is gone say...right until your brain is gone...you were one syllable off....instead of do it like this say do it up....little things like that....or like when you say have some fun with a bottle of rum it woulda been better to say have some fun grab some rum....its more on structure and will make it all flow better, i can bring up all the ones i notice if you want...otherwise just keep on a lookout for stuff like that
rtf on good morning
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05-09-07, 02:22 PM
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10:23 till i'm 86
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IP: E979 6945
im just diggin the heavy bass. some square dance type shit hah
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05-09-07, 11:05 PM
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IP: 2806 F6A9
the flow wuz boring...and the quality was sorta peaking........u had some lines that were packed wit too many syllables...overall it wasn't that nice of a track needs some polishin'.....i guess u just gotta get back into it......aiite man stay up.....
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05-11-07, 03:34 PM
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IP: FF2C 8999
Lol oh well...
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05-12-07, 10:11 PM
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Addicted
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IP: 6ABD 581C
yea ur flow was ehhh...lyrically is ehh too....kinda of boring....i like ur voice tho.....beat is weird....all the verses had the same flow to me.....overall this was decent....keep doin ur thang hommie holla at ya boy =1=
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