Remember lookin in the mirror
vanishing was emotions, don't give
a fuck about life cause my soul is
corroded///
Regurgitated all my pride ankels
strangled on cliffs before I die a lost cause
let me light my last spliff///
a suicidal mind frame and my patience is thin
could give you reasons why i cry
but you're not listenin///
scared to go to sleep at night for fear of dying in dreams, sold my life to the devil so now I can't be redeemed///
called GOD, paged the devil
left a message for fate, why should I
second chance my life, it's tragedy that I face///
squinting deep into my eyes for the sessions of tears,
but can't cry when you packed passions
and moved out fears///
i'm not scared of anything not even dying is scarey
cause when I go to hell it's to the devil I'm happily married///
my brain is chopped like machetti's
so I'm crazy you see, I like to watch people
bleed a suicidal tendency///
hearts on sleeves is not my thing so it's gone
and diminished an advocate for evil genes
but my minds not finished///
my fingers get all numb again when
surrounded by knives can kill another
human life but yet I cant take mine///
so once again I'm at point A I cant call on the LORD
if anything he might show up when I'm safe in the morgue///
when I die, with strangled ankles on the highest of cliffs I wake up from my dream sweatin' and fire up my last spliff///



oh it's nuthin really just try to relate like when shyt just seems to keep goin wrong for no muthaphuccin reason....I dont believe in bad or good luck so....whut is it
*~Holler~*

^^^~~~^^^~~~

suicide is a played topic you need to work on you rhymes it didnt flow that good

^^^^^

damm, what kinda reply is that!? ... but yeah, there's a point there, suicide verses have been seen here alot... topic about isolation and shit like that... only everybody got a different perspective on it... so it's not really the same thing over and over... like some may think...
Yo man, this piece was aight, the flow was abit off on this one though kid... had some strong vocab at the begining... then it got a bit more simple, concept was nice though, just work more on that flow... thas all...

-1-

thanx....i'll consider dat next tyme
*~Holler~*

It is a played out topic but ugh..the way I look at it is this .. when you in one of those moods...that's the mood you in..you cant change that shit..just like ppl writing about that love shit all the time..now thats depressing... you got a good rhyme scheme...maybe you were just lacking those certain words to fit the emotion of it.. OoNnEe keep ya head up...

Suicide topics are not played. Its a real life topic, something that people deal with...everyday

ya had a good verse there,decent vocab and it flowed aight.Dont mind these heads sayin its played out,cuz when sum new cat on BET rap about chicks and jewels,they bump it like its brand new.Jus do u,Stay ^
-Avi

THNX for the opinions keep em comin tho"