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Old 04-14-09, 12:01 AM   #1
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i need yalls help go here...

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...449#post3270449

...and tell me what i need to do to improve my mix...nothing dumb like get someone else to record or any of that bull shit...but i dunno if i should auto tune the hook, if i like the hook as is etc. help me out and give me some feed on what you would do to the song to improve it....thanks...
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Old 04-14-09, 01:32 AM   #2
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honestly

fucking dope verses

chorus - brutal

i'd get someone to sing it for you personally, someone who is an actual singer and you'd have a hit...
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Old 04-14-09, 02:57 AM   #3
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listening,first hook you cant hear very good.dope lyircs,u can tell theres dubs,but not very good,second hooks good,2nd verse dope lyrics,3rd hooks good,3rd verse mixing and dubs are good.overall pretty sick
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Old 04-14-09, 03:05 AM   #4
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dont listen to him the hooks weren't good lol trust me
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Old 04-14-09, 07:43 AM   #5
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honestly

fucking dope verses

chorus - brutal

i'd get someone to sing it for you personally, someone who is an actual singer and you'd have a hit...


word to this. verses were dope but u could def use an actual singer on hooks. I liked.
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Old 04-14-09, 11:04 AM   #6
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yeah im struggling with the hooks, cuz the song is called on my own...i was thinking autotune, but than again that might take it a direction i dont want it to go...ima experiment some more tho before i pass it off
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Old 04-14-09, 11:18 AM   #7
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dude... your vocals really remind me of eminem, theyve never really sounded THAT similar to eminem before just in this song... dont use autotune! for fuck sake dont be another one of those rappers who over use that shit...

you really just need to try your hardest to sing it better i think... or make it sound more solid somehow.. i mean its not THAT bad... it just needs work man..
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Old 04-14-09, 11:18 AM   #8
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the verses are all good i think though..
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Old 04-14-09, 11:20 AM   #9
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better layering of the hook man.. layers are the key to a solid hook.
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Old 04-14-09, 11:50 AM   #10
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its layered over 4 times already
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
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i dropped out and joined a band instead


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Old 04-14-09, 03:50 PM   #11
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hmm.. i dunno, maybe just keep practicing your singing till you get it sounding more professional... cause its fundementally a song about you man getting someone else to sing a hook like that wouldnt sound right.
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Old 04-14-09, 04:22 PM   #12
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it wouldnt hurt to atleast try the auto-tunes out and see how it sounds in comparison even tho that shit is played... mainstream dudes would dig it tho -_-
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Old 04-14-09, 04:39 PM   #13
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yo jay. send the hooks my way. i have a bunch of pitch finding and shit to do that shit. if not i can help you or got a singer that will.

for reaall because i think its dope so farrr
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Old 04-14-09, 06:22 PM   #14
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ill send somethin your way soon for the collab, after that if i havent fixed this shit yet ill send it over
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
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i dropped out and joined a band instead


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Old 04-14-09, 06:56 PM   #15
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I'd say on the hook do one main vocal and then record 4 overdubs and pan each one over L and R.
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