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Old 09-10-06, 09:38 AM   #1
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LBL Magazine (10th September 2006)

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Intro

Not a bad week actually. A few no-shows but nothing drastic. Some tight battles like Brock Sampson vs L.I., that battle was very good and a worthy champ match no doubt. Brock won that battle and retained his championship, he’ll be facing Sonny Dimebags who won the contendership battle and if both try in that, it’ll be a hot battle.

The LBL Cypher

Average cypher again this week. It was mainly participated in by 3 people, Artistik, Wordz Ahgod and Faime S. Quotez. And the winner for this week is…Artistik. Yeah, he pretty much ran away with it. Check his bars, they were all tight, especially the cellar bar:

now i'm coming at ya chick bitch, so i got a similer plan and a statement..
that i'll show the bitch my downstairs.. n watch her celler ass in my basement
i gotta settle the score.. ima reviel u for the fraud u are, ya lame kid
cuz i pictured u being wack.. exposed, developed n framed bitch
so fuck the long wait, i'll rob you for all a ya weight
n if i get caught..
i'll tell the judge my hands just felon your face

Wordz Ahgod had this cool bar:

you sick kid, you need to attend meetings or get beat with the belt
Biting legends aint what I ment when I said seek professional help

And Faime S. Quotez dropped this decent line.

Said my new name WAK, and said you dropped it? How lame...
even though true, cause you did 'drop WAK'. .
....but I don't mean the name!

Battle Reviews

LBL Championship Match: 1. Brock Sampson (7-0) vs 2. L.I. (5-0)

This was a tight battle. I was surprised cos I thought it’d be pretty whack cos of Brock saying that he weren’t really gonna try, and L.I. having not dropped a nice verse in a few weeks. But it ended up being a hot battle. Brock dropped first and his verse was niiice. He had a re-seeding bar that was fucking dope, a cross-hairs bar that was nice, a beatles bar that was cool and a fungi bar that was tight. L.I. dropped and as I said I wasn’t expecting shit, but he dropped tight as well. He had a sonned bar that played off a previous post that was dope, a cater bar that was tight and a scratchin cd’s bar that was clever. It was pretty clear that Brock just edged this one though, and the voting showed that as he won 7-0. Props to both for a nice battle though.

LBL Contendership Match: 3. Sonny Dimebags (8-3) vs 4. Malicious (5-1)

Malicious posted saying how whack voting was here cos he was losing, I laughed at him at that time and thought stfu you stupid faggot. But I actually thought he won this battle. He had a singles bar that was pretty cool and a degraded bar that was fucking dope. Sonny had nothing at all in my opinion. But in the end Sonny won this 8-0.

5. JTR (14-6) vs 6. Stanza (3-2)

Murder pretty much. Stanza dropped nothing of note, his verse was ass. He even capitalizes every word in his verses, that shit is newby as fuck. JTR dropped a cool verse, he had a record bar that was tight, a no, k bar that was nice and a sig bar that was tight as well. JTR took this very easily and won 6-0.

7. DaTrusHurtz (6-0) vs 8. SPuL (6-0)

This battle was aight. Spul's verse was pretty average though, the spit shines bar was tight but apart from that I wasn't feeling anything else. DaTrus had the wool bar, that was dope and creative. The mack battle bar was nice as well, it hit hard. DaTrus fed but Spul swayed so it came down to me to decide this battle, and I thought DaTrus took it. Voting ended up 6-5 to DaTrusHurtz to give him the win.

9. Wordz Ahgod (4-1) vs 10. Euthanize (5-5)

Surprising here. Wordz came alright with a pretty decent verse, the 5-6 bar was dope, I was really feeling that. His swell face up bar was decent as well. Euthanize dropped nothing of note, I haven’t a clue why he asks for pic battles cos he’s awful at them. His disses are all “something something…like your long nose” and stuff. They just don’t hit hard in the slightest. Wordz took this easily, winning 5-0.

11. Flash (4-1) vs 12. Aeral (3-0)

Aeral didn’t vote, if he did he would have sweeped this by a lot of votes. Aeral smashed Flash’s verse really, Flash didn’t have anything of note. But Flash voted, so Flash won.

13. Artistik (2-1) vs 14. Eddie (1-0)

Pretty whack battle here. Artistik had an SE line that was pretty clever, I was feeling that. Eddie had nothing, his verse was straight ass. Artistik rightfully took this 5-0.

15. urmomsuxdixx (3-1) vs 16. Thoughts (0-3)

Thoughts no-showed. Urmomsuxdixxx won.

17. T.r.oo.P (1-2) vs 18. Out Writechas (0-1)

Out Writechas no-showed. Troop won.

19. SMG (0-1) vs 20. Sinful (0-0)

Double no-show.

21. Gho$t Wrighter (0-0) vs 22. Sizzle (0-0)

Neither voted, both lost. Ironic that they were bitching about getting no votes.

23. Caustic (0-0) vs 24. Platinum (0-0)

Caustic no-showed. Platinum won.

25. Untold (6-3) vs 26. N.Tavarez (0-0)

Not a bad battle here, both verses were just fairly, I dunno, average. Tavarez dropped first and his verse was alright, he had a groove bar that was dope. Untold dropped and his verse was also alright, he had a nail biter bar that was tight. This was pretty close, but Tavarez ended up taking it fairly easily and he won 4-0.

No Show Verses

T.r.oo.P

you was picked to win this battle?well tell me who said
cuz i can cum drop under 30 minz left..kinda like u in bed
if bein difficult takes a day,and impossible takes a week
2 OutWritechas takes me no more than a smidgit of each
and 4 all that dont kno..you's a homo & you not no thug
i heard slurpin noises n the boys bathroom
so i kicked in the door 2 whats goin on & damn Its Oh Dub

im only dropp 6 on this bitch.

If u show Match Me

Top Punches

Ya rec'll get fucked up worse, you should start flee'in dude
WHO THE FUCK brags in their sig about being 3-2!?

22. JTR vs Stanza

Im informal ...kicking niggaz through walls like Portals
I'll swell his face up so much, you'd think his lips were normal

21. Wordz Ahgod vs Euthanize

'n this battle is close, but i'm more raw wit the four
tav'll think it's a nail biter.. cause i'll be hammerin his jaw to the floor

20. Untold vs N.Tavarez

Straight beatin' you, ladies don't like ya, ya face gives a bit of a hurl
"NO, K" aint ya crew it's the response you obtain from hittin' on girls

19. JTR vs Stanza

Let's talk computer's herb, u kno keeping it straight
cuz last time SE got noticed on a pc.. was windows 98

18. Artistik vs Eddie

How long ya'll been together? man fuck, i swear it's disturbin,
The bitch can get bangs.... and this faggot'll still be a virgin

17. Aeral vs Flash

u dont have a shot to champ again. ur gonna be beaten
Brock's scratchin CD's just for a logical chance at repeatin

16. L.I. vs Brock Sampson

i wont lie da kids accomplished shit in life although it was'nt fun
kid put out a ton of singles, since he always been one

15. Malicious vs Sonny Dimebags

Chicks talk to L.I. but they soon leave to get medicine
cuz they think ur a fungi, just somethin they don't wanna risk catchin

14. Brock Sampson vs L.I.

I'll give you your first loss, but don't hate me for giving
Cuz a SPuL spit shines, while that's how you make your living

13. SPuL vs DaTrusHurtz

so many roaches & insects in ya crib, it's hard to live no doubt
shit, Yoko Ono couldn't break up The Beatles that live in ya house

12. Brock Sampson vs L.I.

N' LOL @ U in a mack battle, you've never left any hurtin'
Cuz ya verse was a bunch of lines ur too afraid to say to women in person

11. DaTrusHurtz vs SPuL

Bitch, i'm gonna knock you out, GET IT!? UNASTAND!? I'll sock this kid
Do I have to draw you the picture? You already got that sig!

10. JTR vs Stanza

my guns is like hair treatment & it's important you know
I'll put so many cross-hairs on u, it'll look like u sportin a fro

9. Brock Sampson vs L.I.

im ahead by miles. Merc outshined ya, ur just a back up
so i'll cater you a loss to show that Butler would be a better matchup

8. L.I. vs Brock Sampson

Quote:
Originally Posted by Ebircs
lol............i tried to name my 2nd son brock sampson......seriously......


dude. he aint playin and that puts bro at a disadvantage
ill have sonned Brock so bad. . that kids wish was granted

7. L.I. vs Brock Sampson

Son, I'll nightclub these bay niggaz - like studio fifty fo'
And leave you 5 - 6 ...like if you stood on your tippy toes

6. Wordz Ahgod vs Euthanize

And about what I've seen, I just wish these biters would die
In fact, ur the ONLY SPul that couldn't pull the wool over our eyes

5. DaTrusHurtz vs SPuL

Im in a groove son its over your dead..........
YOu'll be in a groove too, when my car wheels run over ya head

4. N.Tavarez vs Untold

Im knockin da shit outta dis kid, punches not hesitated
And dis bitch woulda brung his A game, if i aint leave em so degraded

3. Malicious vs Sonny Dimebags

The heavier it is it floats better, that's tested so consider it a rule,
with that being said...
..tell your bitch to let the vest go, there's no way she'd ever drown at the pool

2. Aeral vs Flash

u need to harvest some lines, but off the top ur a born hoe
but ur hairline keeps re-seeding, in hopes it can grow a corn row

1. Brock Sampson vs L.I.

Verse of the Week

Brock Sampson

yoooooooo....ain't got time for this but,

my guns is like hair treatment & it's important you know
I'll put so many cross-hairs on u, it'll look like u sportin a fro
plus puttin ya hoe in positions, given her a taste..no frontin
way we try angles, u thought we were takin the shape when fuckin
this kids nothin,..u can't visualize how u'll be done is some minutes
cuz I put my knuckles thru Elzhi like I had beef with Slum Village
so many roaches & insects in ya crib, it's hard to live no doubt
shit, Yoko Ono couldn't break up The Beatles that live in ya house
ur worse than a lie, the worst cat to text since the ones I beat so no doubt Im stoppin this guy
^yeah I streatched that, so medics'll have a place to rest u b4 hospitalized
u need to harvest some lines, but off the top ur a born hoe
but ur hairline keeps re-seeding, in hopes it can grow a corn row
Chicks talk to L.I. but they soon leave to get medicine
cuz they think ur a fungi, just somethin they don't wanna risk catchin
dissin u is like breakin dishes, so get ready for this pests fate
cuz not only will I smash ya glass jaw, I'll be crackin ya chest plate
L.I.? before I came to this league, I neva heard of the man
but like Merc, it's nothin to kill U2, like a plot to murda the band
no doubt I'll get the Dub, cuz u came with simple stuff fag
& have u bangin ya head over this L, like the smilie in the mental funk ad
The Quiet Storm huh?? We already know they some shady stealers
cuz most of his boys are has benz like Mercedes dealers

2nd – L.I.
3rd - JTR

Battle of the Week

Brock Sampson vs L.I.

Brock Sampson

yoooooooo....ain't got time for this but,

my guns is like hair treatment & it's important you know
I'll put so many cross-hairs on u, it'll look like u sportin a fro
plus puttin ya hoe in positions, given her a taste..no frontin
way we try angles, u thought we were takin the shape when fuckin
this kids nothin,..u can't visualize how u'll be done is some minutes
cuz I put my knuckles thru Elzhi like I had beef with Slum Village
so many roaches & insects in ya crib, it's hard to live no doubt
shit, Yoko Ono couldn't break up The Beatles that live in ya house
ur worse than a lie, the worst cat to text since the ones I beat so no doubt Im stoppin this guy
^yeah I streatched that, so medics'll have a place to rest u b4 hospitalized
u need to harvest some lines, but off the top ur a born hoe
but ur hairline keeps re-seeding, in hopes it can grow a corn row
Chicks talk to L.I. but they soon leave to get medicine
cuz they think ur a fungi, just somethin they don't wanna risk catchin
dissin u is like breakin dishes, so get ready for this pests fate
cuz not only will I smash ya glass jaw, I'll be crackin ya chest plate
L.I.? before I came to this league, I neva heard of the man
but like Merc, it's nothin to kill U2, like a plot to murda the band
no doubt I'll get the Dub, cuz u came with simple stuff fag
& have u bangin ya head over this L, like the smilie in the mental funk ad
The Quiet Storm huh?? We already know they some shady stealers
cuz most of his boys are has benz like Mercedes dealers

L.I.

22? Alright kid..

Quote:
Originally Posted by Ebircs
lol............i tried to name my 2nd son brock sampson......seriously......


dude. he aint playin and that puts bro at a disadvantage
ill have sonned Brock so bad. . that kids wish was granted
your a fan kid. rap aint your thing so this nerd best stop it
n i understand you get B'S in school cause you continually drop it
get rocked kid. this prep will get beat for a while
i'll pop your collar out its socket until polo's go out of style
im ahead by miles. Merc outshined ya, ur just a back up
so i'll cater you a loss to show that Butler would be a better matchup
bitch is ass. you always lose to better guys
& next week will remind you of july 1st.....record-wise
bitch you remind me of forums the way you try dissin me
thatll make your shot at LBL Hall of Fame the co-topic. . History
im glistening. im smokin this herb while smokin herb stree-free
cause i've got a dime bag in my pocket. .
. . . . . . . . . . . . .and ill be matched with one next week
son your bringing the ass. ur rep is nothing this site will bare
n Kemp removed top 10 battles. . once you made it there
u dont have a shot to champ again. ur gonna be beaten
Brock's scratchin CD's just for a logical chance at repeatin
bitch im giving u the upper hand. ill drop 20 and leave this readin
so make this a handicap match cause that fits u after this beating

meh.

2nd – DaTrusHurtz vs SPuL
3rd – Untold vs JTR

Predictions

LBL Championship Match: 1. Brock Sampson (8-0) vs 2. Sonny Dimebags (9-3)

Should be a tight battle if Sonny drops how he can. I thought Sonny’s verse last week was pretty whack, but if he drops to his full ability then he could give Brock a good battle. If not then Brock will smash him. I still think Brock will take this though however well Sonny drops, so Brock to win.

LBL Contendership Match: 3. JTR (15-6) vs 4. DaTrusHurtz (7-0)

This’ll be a hot battle. JTR has been on a role for the past couple of weeks and DaTrus will have to drop nice to counter that. Whether or not he can I dunno. Based on the previous weeks JTR will probably take this, so I’m gonna stick with the safe bet and say JTR to win.

5. Wordz Ahgod (5-1) vs 6. Erel Avent (9-3)

lol damn Erel’s something else. He tries to bullshit me saying he signed out one week so he shouldn’t get the loss, when there is no evidence in any posts or PM’s or anything that he had. But still, I can’t be fucked to beef so he’s in at 9-3. He’s a tight battler as well and I expect him to win the league sooner or later. Wordz came pretty decent last week but Erel should win this battle pretty easily.

7. Flash (5-1) vs 8. Artistik (3-1)

This’ll be onesided. Artistik dropped eh last week but that’s cos he couldn’t be bothered to try. If he does try then he’ll move into the contendership battle next week, no doubt. Flash is ok but he ain’t as good as Artistik. Artistik to win.

9. L.I. (5-1) vs 10. Malicious (5-2)

This could be a battle to watch actually. I thought Malicious won last week and he had a couple of tight bars and L.I. dropped a nice verse last week also. But I think Malicious will probably no-show, so L.I. will win here.

11. urmomsuxdixxx (4-1) vs 12. T.r.oo.P (2-2)

urmom is just better than Troop no doubt, they battled a couple of weeks ago and urmom would have won but he didn’t post links, and neither did Troop. So they both lost. But yeah, this’ll be a repeat performance but with urmomsuxdixxx posting links and winning.

13. Platinum (1-0) vs 14. N.Tavarez (1-0)

I still haven’t a clue about how good Platinum is or anything, and Tavarez is tight, so Tavarez will win this either by no-show or by FLAWLESSING PLATINUM.

15. Stanza (3-3) vs 16. Euthanize (5-6)

Euth didn’t drop great last week but when he tries he can be pretty decent. Stanza is just to be honest with the dude, whack. Euthanize will take this easily.

17. Aeral (3-1) vs 18. Sizzle (0-1)

Aeral would be up the ranks if he had of voted, but he didn’t, so he isn’t. Sizzle dropped alright and would have beaten Ghost Wrighter last week, but he didn’t vote, so he didn’t. I think Aeral is better though, so if both show and stuff then Aeral should take this.

19. Untold (6-4) vs 20. Gho$t Wrighter (0-1)

Untold came close to beating N.Tavarez last week but he narrowly missed out, where as Ghost lost to Sizzle. This should be a pretty easy win for Untold.

21. 9th Degree (0-0) vs 22. Faime S. Quotez (0-0)

9th Degree is finally in the league, it’s taken him forever to sign up but he finally has and he has a pretty easy battle to start. Faime is ok but he ain’t great, so 9th should beat him pretty easily here.

23. Tony Brown (0-0) vs 24. Trey MethodZ (0-0)

Tony Brown is ok when he tries, Trey is just whack. Tony should take this.

5 Battles To Watch

1. JTR vs DaTrusHurtz
2. Brock Sampson vs Sonny Dimebags
3. Untold vs Sizzle
4. Wordz Ahgod vs Erel Avent
5. L.I. vs Malicious

Don’t Sleep On

Aeral – He’ll prob no-show this week but if he doesn’t then he’s not to be slept on, as he’s pretty tight.

Malicious – Yeah I know, strange aye. But he dropped pretty cool last week and if he stays in, doesn’t bitch, tries and votes he could be a pretty good battler.

Wordz Ahgod – Dropped a decent verse last week and he seems to be improving by the week.

Must Be Sleeping

Sonny Dimebags – He can be so tight when he tries, but it seems like he hasn’t been trying for so long. It’s annoying, cos as I said he has the potential to champ the league, but for whatever reason it’s like he doesn’t want to put the effort in.

Top 10 Power Rankings

10. 9th Degree – Is finally signed into the league after signing into every fucking whack league that came along on RV, then taking 25 weeks to sign into the first nice one that comes along, at it’s weakest point. Seems like a pattern right there, but that ain’t for me to judge. Anyway, 9th is a nice battler but he still seems pretty rusty. It’ll be interesting to see how he does as at his prime he was dope.

9. Untold – Has caught a couple of harsh losses over a two week period, having to face both JTR and N.Tavarez. That’s two RV legends right there and Untold came close against both, so it shows that he’s tight. Should be moving up the league again very soon.

8. N.Tavarez – Dropped alright against Untold last week and as long as he tries, votes and everything then he’ll be moving up the rankings no doubt.

7. Artistik – Pretty tight battler, it just depends on whether or not he wants to try, I don’t think he does so he prob won’t be power ranked again, or even in the league after this week praps.

6. L.I. – Dropped tight against Brock but Brock just dropped better, if he stays in the league and keeps improving weekly he could champ it.

5. Sonny Dimebags – Very tight battler when he tries, but he seems to be pretty awful when he doesn’t. I’m still waiting to see flashes of the verse he dropped against N.Tavarez months ago, but I haven’t seen anything from him that comes near that since then.

4. Erel Avent – He’s back in the league after a one week hiatus, and he’s still someone who I could see winning this league. He tends to drop rather inconsistently though so if he drops nice verses for a few weeks then he can champ the league.

3. DaTrusHurtz – Just behind JTR, but if he tries his hardest and drops a nice verse then he could be facing Brock Sampson next week.

2. JTR – Has been dropping nicely for the past couple of weeks, and if he can get past DaTrusHurtz he has a very good chance of finally champing the league.

1. Brock Sampson – Dropped a dope verse last week against L.I. and should probably retain his title this week against Sonny. He’s on a roll lately and could be champ for quite a few weeks to come.

Outro

So yeah, the league ain’t looking great numbers wise but it’s just in a rut. Shit’ll get better soon, no doubt. Just give it a few weeks or more and things’ll be dope again. Peace.

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Old 09-10-06, 10:45 AM   #2
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Old 09-10-06, 11:12 AM   #3
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cool. now hit the bbl mag you crackhead
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good job at gettin' the mag and everything up quickly this week, good shit
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Old 09-10-06, 11:22 AM   #5
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cool. now hit the bbl mag you crackhead



but good shit kemp. keep the league alive. that cypher shit looks like its a pain in the ass on the mods. you should make it so whoever posts more than twice in it is DQ'd. that way people are forced to post good and not clutter the thread
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Old 09-10-06, 11:22 AM   #6
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dope mag. thanks for the props.
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Old 09-10-06, 12:49 PM   #7
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nice mag kemp....
keep it thugish rugish fam
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dope mag man.

and ur right, i have been comin average. i need to step it up.

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Old 09-10-06, 02:43 PM   #9
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werd to the mag....my time is decreasing cuz of life's responsibilities. Imma see how long Ill be able to hang around b4 a breather.
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why does the mag say i'm battlin ghost writer, but in my battle it says sizzle?

is there a mistake, or what?
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^ You are, I changed it cos Sizzle would have beat Ghost so he should be higher up the ranks. Stop "wtf omg whatever"ing to things lol, it makes you sound like a SUPERHO.
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..............Good Mag...Even If you diss me everytime .....Its aii though
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atleast i show everyweek ..................aint like i leave yall hangin or nuttin but its aii ....nothin but the net
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^ Oh no doubt. You'll improve over the weeks most definitely. I'd rather have a person who shows every week and improves gradually, than someone who is dope right now and unreliable.

Some tips though:

Don't capitalise every word, it looks awful.
Stop using so many ...............'s, it looks awful also.
Stop stretching your wording so much, example:

Man You Crew dont run Deep Nigga Yall Niggas Is lame
If So I'll Take The Flame and Burn Yall Nigga's
.............................................Till You Be Yellin One Blood Like Game

Your crew don't run deep dude, all ya'll bitches are lame
I'll take the flame 'n burn ya...till you be yellin One Blood like The Game

Also, try and relate the setup to the punch. Like so:

Ima drop fire in this battle, be straight beating ya lame
^ I'll take those flames 'n burn ya...till you be yellin One Blood like The Game
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Old 09-10-06, 04:15 PM   #15
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word....Same shit with me...Im at a different level now then when I first came on this shit. it just takes time and a good awareness of what you are doing and how you do it. Just work to get better at it and dont be afraid to try something new man.
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