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Old 02-10-06, 07:00 PM   #1
Dervla
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Cheater!!!!!!!!

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Before I used to make moves with my knowledge,
hard math and equations numbers I used to demolish.
Then that all stopped when them spooky eyes
..were over my shoulder
I felt his breath, and I shiver, disgusted by the smell
..almost knocked me in a coma.
My mind juice draining as his pencil moves
my visions started to spin, mind hearing dark blues
My fingers twitch, "why you stopped?" the bug said
I felt that I was in a hive. I'm starting to get cold sweats
smoke started coming out of my mouth
"plese stop" feeling thunder from my dark clouds.
took my portable sharpner and started grinding my lead,
hearing its sounds ease my mind, makes me want 2
..go to bed.
Like a alarm clock "You've got five minutes"
It shook me, my body movment got into a frenzy.
His pencil stopped "Finish?"
My eye's open thinking I was dreaming,
then I felt his blood on my hands streaming,
lead cut thru his throat
...That what you get for cheating.

Actually I wrote this one to a beat and a it's for a collab, I'm thinking of revising it, but before I do that, tell me what you think people.
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Old 02-11-06, 11:50 AM   #2
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Old 02-11-06, 11:51 AM   #3
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wow........everytime i read your Om's i am impressed this was well put together you still killing people with topicals wow...am feelin this piece nice drop
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Old 02-11-06, 12:00 PM   #4
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hmmmm this was aight... structure was kinda fucked up... still flowed nicely... nice imagery, and emotion... You put us right inside the character's head... *nods* good shit... coulda been a lil more drawn out for more detail... but over all this was decent... RTF reply to anything I have posted... OM, song, or battle... 1
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Old 02-11-06, 12:19 PM   #5
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Will Do Morph and....fuck what's wrong with internet today!? *Makes a thread*
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 02-11-06, 02:39 PM   #6
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Ya I thought it was good...I liked a lot of it...keep it up.
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Old 02-12-06, 03:41 AM   #7
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wow at this being closed

closed.
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