vibrations of words linking to our passage.
making those weak sound like an outstanding savage.
its mad, but some artist are still being original.
its rare, but those are the legends of war in lyrical
form and divian souls that keep the game alive.
deep inside all our minds. we can see the time of rhymes.
to me the vibe of words is like the soul of all rap.
from gangster to fantasy, from insane and lyrical crap.
its exactly that... that wants me to have alot more.
listen to other words, but try not to keep the score.
some words open a passage, others close a window.
follow the words of divian souls and there u shall see bro.
that not all of us the same, but its love for the game that keeps us together.
and when one is feeling down, fool we all under the weather...
now remember, its love for something that brings armys to its knees.
we have the strenght and knowledge. all we gotta to is believe.
there is no seldom seen, to u it might be just a dream.
well to me its something else... to me its reality.
ive seen the vibe of words in songs change some ones opinion.
so just follow the vibe of words that god has blessed giving......

something short and its been a LONG time since ive writen some of my fantasy rap. tell me what u think and ill return the favor.

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not bad, your flow is pretty good sounds like it could be recorded if you chose to. Your imagery is pretty coo you basically just talkin bout the rap game. Well I just got one opinion to state about one line you had:
from gangster to fantasy, from insane and lyrical crap.
One reason why the game seems to "fall apart" if you might wanna call it's the digrating of other genre within the genre of Rap.
Your rhyme scheme is alright, but if you gonna do a type topical like this you best pack some metaphors and some syllable multiples as well. it was also improve your flow. Another line that I wanna critic is:
and when one is feeling down, fool we all under the weather...
you could make that a metaphore by sayin it like this:
and when one is "falling" down, fool we all under the weather...
Overall not bad I def enjoyed the read and it was not a waste of time. good job man.

rtf here on my open mic called "The Neglected Emo"

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its a good piece man, as voltaire pointed out some of it coulda worked better jus by a few switch ups, but its there. i thought it kinda lacked in the rhyming department a bit as well but itz got a decent message in it, good vocab, i couldnt flow all tha way thru myself but i could see sum of tha lines did flow well together...

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that not all of us the same, but its love for the game that keeps us together.
and when one is feeling down, fool we all under the weather...
now remember, its love for something that brings armys to its knees.
we have the strenght and knowledge. all we gotta to is believe.



i think with sum more time spent u can definately do a good all round verse, not bad at all tho

thanks for the feed fam. im just gettin back on track after a long ass vacation and skool and shit but its good to know i still got it

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uppin' leave some feed on this shit fams.... dont sleep

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What's good scanz,.. this was a decent drop,... decent flow,. alright vocab
liking the way your getting more complex with your wordplay.

Keep writing fams and stay up,.

I'm gonna drop something soon so make sure you peep it.

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word no doubt fams. uppin this piece

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hell yeah bro this shit was dope! very nice piece, keep up the good shit.

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very nice!!!!.................................

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