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Old 02-05-05, 12:06 PM   #1
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Cool complicated freestyle

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HOOK:
My vocabulary is complimentary
it's a combination of explanation
i use concentration wit' this occupation
and i'm sick of people leaving notifacation of elavation(2x)

VERSE:
yo....i'm still working for an education at the end of graduation
they say shit like i can't listen without medifacation
but i'm just workin' at my future proffession
leave 'em guessin that i'm usin' progression
i simply rap with so much aggression
to let 'em know i use protection without expectation
i'll cap any nigga wit' so much penetration
that it'll be a violation without specifacation
i use any motiviation without hesitation
and my heart is so cold like refrigaration
this here is just a simple creative creation
so good that you can't leave any sign of recommendation
my words hit ya like gravitation at the same time usin' levitation
there's no simpler way of putting this into classifacation
and this isn't no hallucination it's just a simple case of
complication, i'm so hungry that it turned into starvation
what i'm textin' is so complexin' that there's no correction
i'm just usin' this style for testin' to see who's the best n'
who's usin' prevention wit' convection
even if i fuck around and get a conviction
you're the plaque and i'm the vaccination
so let's end this song wit' a congratulation

HOOK:
My vocabulary is complimentary
it's a combination of explanation
i use concentration wit' this occupation
and i'm sick of people leaving notifacation of elavation(2x)

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Old 02-05-05, 12:23 PM   #2
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that was ok drop hommie...why did ya call it hook on the verse also?..idk anywayz ya structure needs improvement...flow was ok here nice rythem....Wordplay was used good in dis drop...sum lines i thought were wack but some were dope...nice job its was ok...and work on ya chorus a lil more..thats all i have to say no hate

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Old 02-05-05, 12:32 PM   #3
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thanx for the feedback, i don't mean to sound cocky but i amazed myself with this cuz so far this is one of my personal favorites out of all my raps i did cuz i used kind of a diffrent method on this one and personally i think it worked alot more better, you're right i do need more elavation but this is sorta a sign that i am too me and thanx too you i just noticed that hook thing u mentioned i meant verse but i accidently swiched it around i fixed it now though
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Old 02-05-05, 12:43 PM   #4
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I'd give an 8/10. u kept it consistent through out. i liked that. u gave good vocabs and multis respect on this one.

another thing is that really a freestyle. be honest with me
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Old 02-05-05, 12:47 PM   #5
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thanx man i'll remeba to return the favor whenever u come out wit' you're next
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dont forget to go peep my open mic fam...~1~
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Old 02-05-05, 12:49 PM   #7
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thanx man i'll remeba to return the favor whenever u come out wit' you're next

there is another one called How it Got into me. I don't think it's even been reviewed i'd appreciate one. profilik i'll review yours 2
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Old 02-05-05, 12:50 PM   #8
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k i'll do that for both of ya
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Old 02-05-05, 03:17 PM   #9
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uppin on feedback.....
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Old 02-05-05, 04:12 PM   #10
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yo, i thought that was terrible homie, up ya game nigga
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Old 02-05-05, 05:32 PM   #11
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u only got 8 posts homie let's see who's got the best game..if u even could spit
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Old 02-05-05, 05:34 PM   #12
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I'd give an 8/10. u kept it consistent through out. i liked that. u gave good vocabs and multis respect on this one.

another thing is that really a freestyle. be honest with me


ha not really don't think thats possible knowin that it's been typed but the name is the hardest thing to come up with for me i don't know why
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Old 02-05-05, 07:13 PM   #13
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uppin..............
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Old 02-05-05, 08:05 PM   #14
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still uppin.......
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Old 02-06-05, 12:02 AM   #15
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feedback.......
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