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Part one: My Utopia

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Just my verse and the hook... Audio coming soon

1 line = 1 bar

Keep ya mutha~fucking hands up, till you tear ligaments
Keep this club packed, like Cuban immigrants
Praise and props ta me fa being so damn eloquent
Beat shook niggas down... they out of their element
Shake this fucking place... stampeding elephants
They call me heavenly, even though HD is hell sent
Malicious content... vulgarity is flagrant
Stomp ya fucking feet till we fall in the basement
Burn the constitution, give a fuck what a statement
Crank up ya fucking box till you need a replacement
Expel all energy, burn off carbs, and fat
Nine milli's won't work?, than cop a larger gat
Bounce off the walls till you suffer power-outage
Push on the gas till you excel ya max mileage
Fuck peace, HD just loves the crowd's violence
Only when ya dead do I want ta hear silence

Jump up... stand up... look around and break shit
Rock shit... get drunk form a fucking mash pit
Make thugs call out God's mom, on some pac shit
Keep it pumping till ya drained, that's the fucking topic

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uhhhh, some of this is hot.... some of itz put down like ur on sum gangsta non rhymin poetry...

none tha less, it was gangsta so respect

hmmm there's no line in here that doesn't rhyme... go to www.m-w.com if you don't know how to pronounce something... or how it's really spelled... or even if you just need to look up a meaning... thankx for peeping though... uppin'

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This was good, i liked it. The flow was really good for me. The vocab was nice, but i think u should add some more multies in it, to make the vocab real nice. I think it would sound better in audio than on text tho, which i kno u are doing. The hook was ok, i wasnt really feeling it. But nice drop, lookin forward to hearin it. Please rtf on All I Need, links in my sig peace.

Thankx for the feedback... uppin' 4 more

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sorry dawg, i jus sorta flowed through it quick an sum didnt seem to rhyme,

keep spittin

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