RapVerse.com Community
 Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End RV Radio  

Go Back   RapVerse.com Community > Fresh From The Lab > Textual Releases
User Name
Password
FAQ Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
Old 02-10-06, 01:16 AM   #1
craZed
New to RV
 
Posts: 36
Joined: Feb 2006
From: Da Streetz
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
*Mine This Ore* [requesting feed]

IP: 8298 F3E8

A god of 'Angel demonz', my voice'll 'curdle don'
Reppin 'zero gangsta' till they call me 'murder one'
I 'popped so many pills' became a 'zombie patient'
'World War 3' got me strapped so i 'wrong tha nation'
Leadin killerz 'target huntin', now tha 'search gone'
'Addicted' to gage, a legacy's pledge i wont 'urge on'
'Tug of war' got my hoez on top wit cash wit 'less push'
Under fire by tha 'FBI' cuz my last hitz 'possessed bush'
So quit 'sendin demo'z' I'll stop em 'signin lies'
Spittin gangsta 'mental fire' 2 ya 'blinded eyes'
Ya struck my 'everlastin matches' till ya 'timin shines'
Diggin 'tunnels under corpses' I 'divide tha lines'
So 'fall in love' wit ya bitch, I still 'hold' a 'spineless whore'
'Underground'; I'm dyin in tha game to 'mine this ore' *awe*

Last edited by craZed : 02-10-06 at 03:14 AM.
Send a message via AIM to craZed Send a message via MSN to craZed   Reply With Quote
Old 02-10-06, 01:17 AM   #2
craZed
New to RV
 
Posts: 36
Joined: Feb 2006
From: Da Streetz
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
IP: 8298 F3E8

i posted feed on like 4/5 drops jus now....
Send a message via AIM to craZed Send a message via MSN to craZed   Reply With Quote
Old 02-10-06, 10:46 AM   #3
H.D.
Middle Weight
 
H.D.'s Avatar
 
Posts: 490
Joined: Jan 2006
From: Raven's Nest
Status: Offline
Text Record: 7-6
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 903F 26CB

there's no need to highlight your rhymes... peeps should be able to see them or quit reading other peoples shit till they do understand what rhymes and what doesn't... lyrically this was pretty sound... not real blazing lines, but some pretty decent ones... solid flow too... keep doing what you do man
__________________

\....../
\..../
\../
A.I.

Spilled Inc.




Send a message via AIM to H.D. Send a message via MSN to H.D. Send a message via Yahoo to H.D.   Reply With Quote
Old 02-10-06, 10:25 PM   #4
Bonafide
I Chill in Asylums
 
Bonafide's Avatar
 
Posts: 968
Joined: Aug 2005
From: MA
Status: Offline
IP: 9133 A552

This was pretty nice, lyrics were good for ur first drop betta than most newcomers in my opinion. The vocab and flow was cool, but i kno u can get better. The structure was good too. Not bad for ur first drop, but keep writing man. Please rtf on All I Need, links in my sig.
Send a message via AIM to Bonafide Send a message via MSN to Bonafide Send a message via Yahoo to Bonafide   Reply With Quote
Old 02-11-06, 11:49 AM   #5
Kawn Flixx
FUCK STROBE
 
Kawn Flixx's Avatar
 
Posts: 11,115
Joined: Aug 2003
Status: Offline
Text Record: 70-13
IP: 31C2 62EB

Closed no links

Read The Rules
__________________
The Competition


Send a message via AIM to Kawn Flixx Send a message via MSN to Kawn Flixx   Reply With Quote


Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 02:12 PM.

Powered by vBulletin.
Copyright © 2000-2004 Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.