Mans pitiful fight for life makes way to phenomenal aspects
Boiling oceans cover land mass, no more abdominal projects
Millenniums of survival extinct except for displacing debates
Society falls victim to its greed as it mistaken degrades
Aliens attack for our shit, can world wide army’s fortify humanity
Pirates scavenge a planet, to lace water and crucify profanity
Kids get higher than the dealers through botanical scripting
Metal bands gettin banned for their outrageous satanical bitching
Treaties of peace give way to attacks on planetal co-existing
Einstein resurrected forges mountains of imaginal decrypting

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ight an 2 tha forum mod...... u should at least tell people first b4 u close their thread.. nothin wrong with givin em 24 to do it...

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Lotta vocab in this some of it poorly worded, and just flat out ocward... with all the vocab invovled shoulda had a lot more multies in this... didn't flow as smoothly as most vocab rich open mic would... imagery was kinda lacking... this was too short for the concepts you were working with... didn't go into much detail on any aspect... very vague gloss over... I'd like to see you do a more detailed version of this... as is it's like and outline to what should be dropped... good ideas, just not the most accurate layout of them ... feel me?

RTF 7 Deadly Sinz

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Nice vocab, this was real short man, i wanted to read more to see what you can add into the content with a 60 liner. overall, nice job. your flow was steady, and the topic you chose for this was un-predictable, and i applaud you for that. good job. pz.

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Mankind is just a fable.