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08-08-05, 03:36 PM | #16 | |||||
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Very good imagery and "storytelling". I enjoyed this piece and the impact it had, the realization that the person had of themselves was off the chain. Keep it up, great work..9.9 outta 10.
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08-09-05, 12:54 PM | #17 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Damn Got Fifteen Responses And Want More Now That's Just Straight Up Greedy Home Anyway It Was A Nice Post
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08-09-05, 12:56 PM | #18 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
thanks for the feed people u may now sleep......unless ur nice then post like crazy
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08-09-05, 01:28 PM | #19 | |||||
Guilty Of Chryme
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Dope shyt..
You used nyce vocab, and the piece flowed well. I liked the concept.. If anything, I think this line coulda been worded better: to stop her everlasting excruciating sadness I kinda foresaw the end comin out to be like that but still dope.. 8/10, stay up. |
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08-09-05, 02:00 PM | #20 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
THANKS MAN appreciate it^^^still uppin fa sho
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08-09-05, 04:39 PM | #21 | ||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8A05 210E
damn playa it was real good great keystyle...alot of emotion, creativity, strucutre on point, vocab on point, & evathang in between keep writing i like it
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08-09-05, 04:45 PM | #22 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
haha thanks man much appreciated dudde^^ still uppin for more feed
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08-11-05, 08:39 PM | #23 | |||||
The Paragraph President
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IP: 997D A94C
really short i was feelin it just if it was longer it woulda been more enjoyable, your flow was good, stucture was good, imagery was nice a lil bit random but mostly mine is random. theres nothin bad about that either, vocabulary was alright coulda been a lil bit more upped but overall i was feelin this. good job
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08-11-05, 11:03 PM | #24 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
^^Thanks man really appreciate all the feeback......still uppin of course
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08-11-05, 11:26 PM | #25 | ||||
Semper Fi
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IP: 0825 899A
Yo man this was off da chain in the emotional part man......so emotional had me thinkin u was gothic lol....anyways flow and vocab was on point man......Keep it commin....and keep elevatin....This had me imagine shit so keep doin ya thang and dont let no haters w/e haters that hatin get to ya
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08-11-05, 11:29 PM | #26 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
^^im feelin that fo real man feelin the love................still uppin and yo yung dolla get at me for a collab kid.......we gots to do one.....uppin
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08-13-05, 10:33 PM | #27 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
sick piece............
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