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08-20-05, 03:51 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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"Still In Love Ch.1" (A Hip Hop Soap Opera)
IP: 0825 899A
Green-Tony Green
Bold-Mizz Fyre (When you click intro scroll down till you see still in love (slow jamz)) Intro *Walks in the house yells I'm home........walks and looks in the bathroom.........then walks and looks in the kitchen then heres sounds coming from the bedroom.....walks and looks in the bedroom see's my girl in bed with another man.......walks out the door and gets in the car and drive off* [Verse1:Tony Green] This situation got me observating my life and many decsions. Thinking bout your pretty face lip taste the way we kissing. Hold up my phone ringin....hello.. what up dog. Want believe what I seen when I walked up into my home. I seen Fyre in the bed sweat droppin and bare legs. Didn't know what to do they p-poppin on handstands. But yo I aint got my ear piece I'm gone call you back later. Bout to head back to the house argue like a debater. I'm heading back to my house bout to get things right. And if push come to shove niggaz gone die tonight. *Pulls up in the driveway gets outta car and heads into the house.........but before I do that I pull out my gun....slowly creeps thru the door........kicks open the bedroom door. [Verse2:Tony Green & Mizz Fyre] What the fuck is going on niggaz better get to talkin. Otherwise out this door mafucker you want be walkin. My angers incomprehensible, now i’m seething with mixed emotions My heart racing, hands shaking, up and down like waves in the ocean You caused this comotion being decietful and lying. Baby girl I was tryinn now a Rivers is what you cryinn. But what I really wanna know is who's the guy and were'd you meet him. Cause I'm bout to make a call get my guys to physically greet him. I picked up the phone, deciding to bring back the past, an old friend Knowing that when I didn’t have you, on him I could depend What about all our amends these sins you done commited. But I'm gone let you keep tellin the story till you finished (continue) So predictable, he came over so concerned, asking what’s wrong I told him, this is the chance he’d been waiting on for so long (You slute) We talked for a while, and I stated facts about how I was feeling About all your dealings and his words came across…. so healing He showed his personality, and finally my heart was being embraced I knew then I had to face, that in my head you had been replaced Yet you stayed in my place I brought the food that you ate. But you stayed here everyday smiling and lying to my face. (may I finish) The knock at the door, came as a shock, you were early and unexpected You glanced at me, as he held me close making sure that I was protected Your eyes gave me the story, I only had to read it to know we’re finished All that time together, had now amounted to nothing, we were diminished *Thiers a knock at the door...... and a un identified car in the driveway* TO BE CONTINUED... Last edited by Tony Green : 08-20-05 at 05:01 PM. |
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08-20-05, 03:54 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 0825 899A
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...ewpost&t=205052
^^Link and uppin fo feed and pm me if you'd like to play a character in the next chapter or a future chapter! |
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08-20-05, 05:02 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
uppin to the top!
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08-20-05, 05:30 PM
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IP: B52C 6258
haha this joint was good. i like the r.kelly feel it had to it, ya feel me. there was alot of imagery in there and the lil "chorus" part that explained what was goin on made it feel like you was there or somethin. good joint here ima give it a 9/10.
mizz fyre did her thing too. holla at me RETurn the favor on some links
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08-20-05, 06:24 PM
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Middle Weight
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IP: 8A05 210E
yeah i like da plot of diz in tha 1st chapter it'z jus like R. Kelly's Trapped In Tha CLoset joint i like it alot, vocab, tha situation is so real & i can relate 2 it, structure was great keep writing Ton u got diz imagery shit locked up 10/10 good work
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08-20-05, 11:03 PM
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IP: DB16 D9CD
Nicely done fo real...
Nice story, good lines from both... I want in on the second chapter. |
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08-20-05, 11:04 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 0825 899A
Thanxx LoL nominate it for OM of the month LoL!
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08-20-05, 11:57 PM
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L.E
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IP: DB16 D9CD
I WANT IN NUMBER 2 Mu fucka!!
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08-21-05, 12:26 AM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
^^ I pm'ed yall and we got enough peeps for part 2 haven't really start plannin part 3 yet but uppin!
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08-21-05, 05:45 AM
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**the council**
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IP: 7EA4 D206
lol.....it looks good huh........uppin ya'll............
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08-21-05, 07:15 AM
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E-Style, Bitch.
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IP: FD2F 6364
...This is the gayest shit i ever read, Cant believe I wasted 5 minutes of my life reading this, what the fuck? lol....This some gay ass Emienm an his daughter shit.
I'm sorry an no offence, but i wasnt feelin this at all.
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08-21-05, 10:38 AM
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**the council**
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IP: 05E0 DB6F
^^^thanx for the feed.....uppin
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08-21-05, 11:02 AM
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IP: A50B F55D
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Get your unwanted ass outta herer fuckin hatter! |
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08-21-05, 11:05 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: EF6B 13EC
rofl at meta lol...but on the real i liked this had nice feel to it good emotion n wordplay cud be improved a lil on vocab tho on the all 8.7/10 rtf in the warriors path in ma sig
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08-21-05, 11:28 AM
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IP: A50B F55D
Fvaor returned uppin
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