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Old 08-26-05, 02:21 PM   #1
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[Desert Dancing]

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Life, full of confusion and utterly useless turmoil....
Breaths of fire from the hidden tyrant we call our savior....
Still tranquility remains upon the physically battered face of this earth...
Hands reaching for the sky, reaching for peace, reaching for freedom....
Dances leaving this with dreams of lifes past livin'.......
CHeers of a double minded individual, hatred and love both within' the same action.....
Sand, each grain representing the souls of lost children that god blinded looking for him.....
The sun, the mother...Watching as her children rejoice in this cermeony of utter beauty......
Movements simulating the greatness in which the power of TRUE LOVE has to offer.....
Forfeiting their humanly impurities to thier lord, exposing their devine capable of no crime........
Mind, Body, and soul...Flesh, nothing but an object to them..As they pray and drown in their Desert Dancing.......


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Old 08-27-05, 06:23 PM   #2
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not sure if it was emotional or well-worded..... nice poem.......... i had to read it a couple times, but all the great poems have different interpretations anyway. flow doesn't apply; good structure........ nice piece overall.
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Old 08-28-05, 03:12 PM   #3
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Great vocabulary in this poem,it explained a lot of what you were feeling and you definatley have a way of getting your point across with little words that say big things,lol, anyway dope drop, i look forward to more from you.1
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